Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I really like your contrast between steel and wisps of wonder. Just because something like grace is akin to lace does not mean that it does not have the tensile strength to hold and carry you through.

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thanks for reviewing. glad you liked it.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Wonderful examples of alliteration in this Antomym poem, DALLAS, with "stronger than steel" and, "weaves wisps of wonder".
The first two lines flow flawlessly together, spiraling down into sorrow and despondency.

Great example of exact opposites here, just as this type of poetry is designed to illustrate.

Best of luck to you in the contest...~Dean

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thanks for the great review, Dean. Appreciate it.

reply by Dean Kuch on 15-May-2015

Anytime, my friend...:)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Thanks for giving me a great model on how to do this. Hope stronger than steel--brilliant.
And that unbendable steel WEAVING! Incredible
wisps through despair.
Every word is a gem. I'm betting you'll take the prize.

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thanks for the illustrious review, Shari. My first antonym. It was a real challenge. But then anything new is. There are still a couple of very popular forms that I steer clear of.

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi. I hope you did well in the contest...becasue this is a wonderful peom. I like the turn around and I like the way it is not sentimental, but grounded and still soft.
padumachitta

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thank you for reviewing. Hasn't come up for vote yet. Glad you enjoyed. Can't remember if this is member, or site sponsored. will have to take a look.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very good entry in the contest and might you win. Blessings for a wonderful weekend. May you find great blessings,
Patricia

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thanks for the great review, patriicia.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Exceptional

This is so powerful and well written. You get my last six of the week! I rarely give a six on a short form. A great antonym poem. Good luck in the contest.
teresa

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thanks for the awesome review and the bonus star.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent use of words that captures a light feeling and has a good feeling that comes through. Weaves wisps of wonder through is a clever line, I like the use of the words that begin with w.

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, hope very wonderful this poem is, including your choice of artwork - I would love to have this on my wall! The ambiance, the message, the alliteration - it's all so gorgeous (and inspiring), and how you managed to convey all this in so few words shows true talent, IMO. Bravo. (In fact, although I seldom use one of our sparsely-assigned sixes for a small poem, if I had any, this one would have one.)

EXCEPTIONAL!!!***************************!!!

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you so much, Dawn, for the illustrious review. I loved the artwork also. I have begun a project that will be monopolizing most of my free time but will be ducking in and out periodically.

reply by Dawn Munro on 14-May-2015

Oh, best of luck! You're very welcome. :)

reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thanks, Dawn, for the illustrious review. I have taken on a project that will be monopolizing most of my free time for several months but will be ducking in and out periodically.

Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Hi, busy lady. Thank you for finding the time to enter this contest using a new form (to me anyway). I admired the uplifting message, "steel" hyperbole and addition of alliteration. Your creation is the perfect interpretation of the prompt and should be well-recognized in the voting booth. Brava! -Joan

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Hi, stranger. thank you for the awesome review. I began a project that will be monopolizing most of my free time for several months but will be ducking in from time to time. This is a new form for me also. Very interesting.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is beautiful. Your poem says so much in a small space. Good job with alliteration with [s] and [w].

Good choice of antonyms. Strong message in your poem. No changes.

Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you for the great review.