To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Seeking The Shine"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Green Lake Girl
Cleverly penned poem, Mikey. There's a delicious creepiness to your plays on words. Wonderful alliteration. The ending made me shiver. Well done!
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Cleverly penned poem, Mikey. There's a delicious creepiness to your plays on words. Wonderful alliteration. The ending made me shiver. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
Comment from l.raven
it's all a big ride Michael...and the carousel is the perfect way to show it...as the world turns...so very well put you...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo love
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it's all a big ride Michael...and the carousel is the perfect way to show it...as the world turns...so very well put you...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Tootsie55
Hmm interesting poem. Maybe I should have looked more carefully at the Author's notes to see if there was some sort of gospel message somewhere? Good artwork and settings, mate.
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Hmm interesting poem. Maybe I should have looked more carefully at the Author's notes to see if there was some sort of gospel message somewhere? Good artwork and settings, mate.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Life is rather like a ride on a roundabout(we don't call them carousels here)It has ups and downs with temptations set out to tempt us all the way. We just need to keep on the straight and narrow and we will alight successfully. Good use of alliterative and metaphorical language. Well chosen words in a well presented poem. Faye
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Life is rather like a ride on a roundabout(we don't call them carousels here)It has ups and downs with temptations set out to tempt us all the way. We just need to keep on the straight and narrow and we will alight successfully. Good use of alliterative and metaphorical language. Well chosen words in a well presented poem. Faye
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I knew I shouldn't have given away that last 6. I love the alliteration, and I especially love the way you've written the ending, like the fading away of a piece of music. so powerful, especially coming just after the mention of Satan, and of "all" "grab(bing) for the brass ring." You've sent so much, in such a lyrical and evocative way, and done it in a style that is uniquely your own. Congratulations on another powerful poem.
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I knew I shouldn't have given away that last 6. I love the alliteration, and I especially love the way you've written the ending, like the fading away of a piece of music. so powerful, especially coming just after the mention of Satan, and of "all" "grab(bing) for the brass ring." You've sent so much, in such a lyrical and evocative way, and done it in a style that is uniquely your own. Congratulations on another powerful poem.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
Comment from pattipac
Michael, you have penned an intriguing free-verse poem about how people are lured by the riches and exciting things of life, in an effort to grasp the shiny brass ring extended by Satan. Lesson learned is that all that glitters is not gold.
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Michael, you have penned an intriguing free-verse poem about how people are lured by the riches and exciting things of life, in an effort to grasp the shiny brass ring extended by Satan. Lesson learned is that all that glitters is not gold.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
Comment from patcelaw
I like this. The carousel turning is how life is, as we slowly turn we have to grab the brass ring to keep Satan from throwing us our mount. Patricia.
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I like this. The carousel turning is how life is, as we slowly turn we have to grab the brass ring to keep Satan from throwing us our mount. Patricia.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Clever photo and wording. Color scheme enhances the imagery seen throughout. Well penned for an easy read. Thanks for sharing and God Bless, Deb
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Clever photo and wording. Color scheme enhances the imagery seen throughout. Well penned for an easy read. Thanks for sharing and God Bless, Deb
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow.
Nicely done.
Again you amaze me with the way the words just flow so easy.
Love the repeats at the end as life continues to turn.
"all grab for the shiny brass ring"
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Wow.
Nicely done.
Again you amaze me with the way the words just flow so easy.
Love the repeats at the end as life continues to turn.
"all grab for the shiny brass ring"
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
Comment from Megalips
I love the way you end this with repetition in smaller print...logistical genius. The alliteration carries me on this ride, but I can also watch as so many you describe, experiencing the event from every perspective.
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I love the way you end this with repetition in smaller print...logistical genius. The alliteration carries me on this ride, but I can also watch as so many you describe, experiencing the event from every perspective.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015