Controversial Family Grief - Buried
This is a poem about justice being served.11 total reviews
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It must have been very hard for the family to have to go through it all again.
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It must have been very hard for the family to have to go through it all again.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, Piggies Grandma
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is very well written with good imagery painting a picture in the readers head. Your art work is gorgeous of the lavender orchid. In your poem your rhyme is great. You did an excellent job with metaphor and a good job with alliteration. I enjoyed your lines: "Responsibilities viewed in deep retrospect Defendant denied no wrongful neglect." It's so sad red flags weren't seen about Michael Jackon's doctor scripted drug abuse. I wish you good luck in the Empathy with Grief writing contest with your thought pondering poem. I'd recommend your mighty fine poem to other reviewers. Keep on writing with creativity. Please have a lovely day...Missy.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Poet,
Your poem is very well written with good imagery painting a picture in the readers head. Your art work is gorgeous of the lavender orchid. In your poem your rhyme is great. You did an excellent job with metaphor and a good job with alliteration. I enjoyed your lines: "Responsibilities viewed in deep retrospect Defendant denied no wrongful neglect." It's so sad red flags weren't seen about Michael Jackon's doctor scripted drug abuse. I wish you good luck in the Empathy with Grief writing contest with your thought pondering poem. I'd recommend your mighty fine poem to other reviewers. Keep on writing with creativity. Please have a lovely day...Missy.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks. We all suffer when an injustice
is done to our family and friends. missy98writer
Comment from bowls
This poem is very quiet in tone and thus seems respectful. The rhyming couplets flow softly from stanza to stanza with a hush that seems to signify the end of this ordeal. Although the poem is short it does present the important details of the trial. I have just one question about line 6. With the double negative you are not saying the defendant denies wrongful neglect, but the opposite. Am I reading the incorrectly?
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This poem is very quiet in tone and thus seems respectful. The rhyming couplets flow softly from stanza to stanza with a hush that seems to signify the end of this ordeal. Although the poem is short it does present the important details of the trial. I have just one question about line 6. With the double negative you are not saying the defendant denies wrongful neglect, but the opposite. Am I reading the incorrectly?
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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What I heard was that he did nothing wrong, but
There were so many loose ends that he couldn't
he hiding? Bowls
Comment from elliejean
The TRAGIC Situations began long before Michael passed away. It is amazing when I see how much of a soul we demand form our famous people. People become their fame and only their fame. We drain them dry then try to place blame when they are used up. Good Work.
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The TRAGIC Situations began long before Michael passed away. It is amazing when I see how much of a soul we demand form our famous people. People become their fame and only their fame. We drain them dry then try to place blame when they are used up. Good Work.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, elliejean
Comment from writerwish
I did not know that iris lavender droplets are a symbol of tears. I'm sure his family already had enough sadness and for him to die unjustly is truly a crime.
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I did not know that iris lavender droplets are a symbol of tears. I'm sure his family already had enough sadness and for him to die unjustly is truly a crime.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, writerwish
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A cleverly thoughout
out poem, presented in
couplets, as you speak
of Michael Jackson's
family and their long
struggle. Let's hope
they can now put their
pain to rest.
Margaret
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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A cleverly thoughout
out poem, presented in
couplets, as you speak
of Michael Jackson's
family and their long
struggle. Let's hope
they can now put their
pain to rest.
Margaret
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, Margaret Snowdon
Comment from gazzagodbod
fantastic little poem captured the prompt perfectly the pictures is great to well done my friend and good luck in the contest gazza
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fantastic little poem captured the prompt perfectly the pictures is great to well done my friend and good luck in the contest gazza
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, gazzagodbod
Comment from Mara del Mar
Is a piece very emotive, a message the family of a idol of all times, Michael Jackson, about theme of its death. Excellent entry, congrats and luck.
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Is a piece very emotive, a message the family of a idol of all times, Michael Jackson, about theme of its death. Excellent entry, congrats and luck.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Humble Thanks, Maria del Mar
Comment from bookworm224
Cool take on the empathy/grief prompt. This is a well written poem and I wish you luck in the writing contest. I too was troubled by the hows of how Jackson died. This line best sums it up,"Responsibilities viewed in deep retrospect "
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2011
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Cool take on the empathy/grief prompt. This is a well written poem and I wish you luck in the writing contest. I too was troubled by the hows of how Jackson died. This line best sums it up,"Responsibilities viewed in deep retrospect "
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Thank you kindly, bookworm224
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem that shares your empathy for the jackson family, the picture is beautiful. good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem that shares your empathy for the jackson family, the picture is beautiful. good luck in the contest
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Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
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Thanks,sweetwoodjax