A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "A Simple Misunderstanding"Autobiography of abuse
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Comment from medicnate
Very unfortunate. You can feel the anger come out of each word. This is a very powerful chapter and I feel the anger will start to recede to the recesses of her mind. It did for me, then it comes out as short uncontrollable bursts. Very hard to deal with. Great job with this chapter.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Very unfortunate. You can feel the anger come out of each word. This is a very powerful chapter and I feel the anger will start to recede to the recesses of her mind. It did for me, then it comes out as short uncontrollable bursts. Very hard to deal with. Great job with this chapter.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Thank you. I sincerely appreciate your comments. Many have described my book as a rolle coaster ride, which I think is a good description.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Isn't it sad that your own mother and sister don't stop the abuse. And now there are other younger ones to get abused. What a devil of a man, and you are right about your mother and sister. Cowards or puppets in the hands of a puppet master.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Isn't it sad that your own mother and sister don't stop the abuse. And now there are other younger ones to get abused. What a devil of a man, and you are right about your mother and sister. Cowards or puppets in the hands of a puppet master.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Yes, they were cowards. It's a wonder I did't go crazy.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh dear. I was afraid of something like this. Now I feel very angry on your behalf. This must have been a particularly difficult chapter to write. There are a couple typos etc. Hope you don't mind me pointing them out.
"In the days that followed(, needs a comma)everyone acted as though (, comma not needed) nothing whatsoever....."
The rage I felt for Daddy(,)was now(,)also directed...(commas not needed)
"...knew damn(ed) well I was telling the truth and(,)despite hearing...." (just a comma and 'ed' to add in).
Other than those small errors, great job. Keep on keeping on girl.
Blessings
Kat
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Oh dear. I was afraid of something like this. Now I feel very angry on your behalf. This must have been a particularly difficult chapter to write. There are a couple typos etc. Hope you don't mind me pointing them out.
"In the days that followed(, needs a comma)everyone acted as though (, comma not needed) nothing whatsoever....."
The rage I felt for Daddy(,)was now(,)also directed...(commas not needed)
"...knew damn(ed) well I was telling the truth and(,)despite hearing...." (just a comma and 'ed' to add in).
Other than those small errors, great job. Keep on keeping on girl.
Blessings
Kat
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Thnk you for your kind words. I will go back and make the changes you suggest. Again, thank you for your high ranking.
Comment from laurelp
I could feel your anger through the words you wrote so well. This book is very remarkable. I hope as well as getting out the story is also serves to heal.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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I could feel your anger through the words you wrote so well. This book is very remarkable. I hope as well as getting out the story is also serves to heal.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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I am glad you appreciate my book. Yes, writing it has been marvelous therapy!
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
Good for you for telling your mother. But surely, your mom knows what really happened, right? He was definitely wrong. He put his penis in your vagina. Which again, is wrong. I really hope that your mother found out what really entruly happened because that's not right. Best of luck to you.
Rachel
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Good for you for telling your mother. But surely, your mom knows what really happened, right? He was definitely wrong. He put his penis in your vagina. Which again, is wrong. I really hope that your mother found out what really entruly happened because that's not right. Best of luck to you.
Rachel
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your comments. I appreciate them.
Comment from jodeecee
In an unsettling calm voice, /M/mom said, "Sit down girls, your father and I want to talk to you."
With each passing day, a small part of me seemed to die. Until one day, I woke up and realized the love I once felt from Mom, Teresa and eve/r/yone else I thought cared about me, was gone, completely gone. Instead of feeling cold or alone, a strange sense of comfort came over me. //I realized if no one loved me, it wouldn't hurt when they took it away.// I re-read this a few times, not sure why it didn't make sense, could just be me, I mean it makes sense, just for some reason it sounds weird. Otherwise this too, another great chapter
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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In an unsettling calm voice, /M/mom said, "Sit down girls, your father and I want to talk to you."
With each passing day, a small part of me seemed to die. Until one day, I woke up and realized the love I once felt from Mom, Teresa and eve/r/yone else I thought cared about me, was gone, completely gone. Instead of feeling cold or alone, a strange sense of comfort came over me. //I realized if no one loved me, it wouldn't hurt when they took it away.// I re-read this a few times, not sure why it didn't make sense, could just be me, I mean it makes sense, just for some reason it sounds weird. Otherwise this too, another great chapter
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thanks for the kind review and very helpful sp./grammar corrections...I must have been tired
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Powerful and gripping writing. I've been following your story from the beginning and I just knew the denial was coming. How AWFUL! The betrayal, that no one would believe this girl is astounding. Again, it's like being raped by BOTH parents--one physically, and the other, emotionally. I question how many children must endure lives like this. Riviting work.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Powerful and gripping writing. I've been following your story from the beginning and I just knew the denial was coming. How AWFUL! The betrayal, that no one would believe this girl is astounding. Again, it's like being raped by BOTH parents--one physically, and the other, emotionally. I question how many children must endure lives like this. Riviting work.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. A difficult book to read...I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Ray Edwards
A well-written piece. I went back and started reading from the beginning, but when I got to chapter nine I had to stop. Maybe I'll go back and read from ch. 10, but as a father of an eight-year-old girl I just can't read ch. 9. I literally have tears welling up.
As for this chapter, it is as well-written as the rest of the book. Job well done.
Cheers,
Ray
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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A well-written piece. I went back and started reading from the beginning, but when I got to chapter nine I had to stop. Maybe I'll go back and read from ch. 10, but as a father of an eight-year-old girl I just can't read ch. 9. I literally have tears welling up.
As for this chapter, it is as well-written as the rest of the book. Job well done.
Cheers,
Ray
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thak you for your kind words. I am sorry the chapter made you so sad but I understand the difficulty in reading about such things. Again, thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Arkine
A lot of emotion in this chapter and even though I didn't read the last one, I can tell by Valerie's thoughts that whatever was on the answering machine was NOT something a father should be saying to his daughter(s). I didn't spot any errors.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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A lot of emotion in this chapter and even though I didn't read the last one, I can tell by Valerie's thoughts that whatever was on the answering machine was NOT something a father should be saying to his daughter(s). I didn't spot any errors.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you. Just a point of interest, this was in the mid fifties and it was on old-fashioned wire-recoder. The ones that preceeded tape reorders.
Comment from jojosug
I'm so glad she is angry and has every right to be. Again this story held my full attention and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter, even though it will be grim. I'm really hoping Valerie keeps up her fight back.
Jo
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I'm so glad she is angry and has every right to be. Again this story held my full attention and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter, even though it will be grim. I'm really hoping Valerie keeps up her fight back.
Jo
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thak you. Sorry about the story being so grim...unavoidable.