Love Poem to Chautauqua, NY
A Free Verse poem to my favorite spot on Earth.7 total reviews
Comment from Jill McCauslin
I love this poem. Is it because I know what it's like to be a senior in college working on a senior project? Perhaps. But you really make us feel like we're there in Chautauqua, bundled up against the cold. Did you really walk 13 miles?
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I love this poem. Is it because I know what it's like to be a senior in college working on a senior project? Perhaps. But you really make us feel like we're there in Chautauqua, bundled up against the cold. Did you really walk 13 miles?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2025
Comment from Harry Craft
Such a great poem about the freedom to just take off and do something crazy! I Truly enjoyed reading this poem and the thought of freedom it brings. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Such a great poem about the freedom to just take off and do something crazy! I Truly enjoyed reading this poem and the thought of freedom it brings. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Harry. I so appreciate your reading and your kind words.
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You are so welcome Laurie!
Comment from Tim Margetts
A place I have never been to, Laurie, but feel I need to.
I really enjoyed this-there's a rawness and quiet beauty to it that drew me in immediately. The opening line, "Our story is long and lush," sets a rich emotional tone, and the poem delivers on it. I loved how specific the details were: the black-and-white generics, the musty quilts, the Rickety Rackety Thunder Bridge-all those small touchstones give the poem texture and authenticity.
The narrative voice feels deeply personal without slipping into sentimentality. There's a great balance between external description and inner emotion, particularly in lines like "I wandered through your gated grounds / without seeing another soul." It's contemplative and crisp, without a single overdone line.
If I were to suggest anything, it would be purely optional: perhaps one or two shorter stanzas could be trimmed just slightly for momentum-but honestly, the meandering feel fits the tone well.
Tim x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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A place I have never been to, Laurie, but feel I need to.
I really enjoyed this-there's a rawness and quiet beauty to it that drew me in immediately. The opening line, "Our story is long and lush," sets a rich emotional tone, and the poem delivers on it. I loved how specific the details were: the black-and-white generics, the musty quilts, the Rickety Rackety Thunder Bridge-all those small touchstones give the poem texture and authenticity.
The narrative voice feels deeply personal without slipping into sentimentality. There's a great balance between external description and inner emotion, particularly in lines like "I wandered through your gated grounds / without seeing another soul." It's contemplative and crisp, without a single overdone line.
If I were to suggest anything, it would be purely optional: perhaps one or two shorter stanzas could be trimmed just slightly for momentum-but honestly, the meandering feel fits the tone well.
Tim x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Apologies, Tim, I thought I replied to this beautiful and insightful review, but FS says otherwise. Thank you so much for going into such depth on this one, and I hope I can return your kindness one day.
Comment from Wendy G
Very vivid descriptions of this place and of yourself and your feelings as you made your "pilgrimage" to a place of peace and reflection. A fine entry - sending best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Very vivid descriptions of this place and of yourself and your feelings as you made your "pilgrimage" to a place of peace and reflection. A fine entry - sending best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Apologies, Wendy. I thought I had replied to this kind review earlier, but FS says otherwise. Thank you so much for stopping to read me!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a perfect weekend retreat to escape to here laurie and your memories of this place and vivid and enviable, I enjoyed your fine words, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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This sounds like a perfect weekend retreat to escape to here laurie and your memories of this place and vivid and enviable, I enjoyed your fine words, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Thanks, Dolly, and apologies--I thought I had already replied to this kind review, but FS tells me otherwise. I so appreciate your having read this one.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, free verse for poetry about a place that you love and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud and your presentation is very nice.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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This is a very well written, free verse for poetry about a place that you love and I very much enjoyed listening to it. It flows very well when it is read aloud and your presentation is very nice.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind words!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I've seen the secluded place where Dillon Thomas wrote his poetry, it's on a high place overlooking the sea in Wales, UK, a beautiful spoke looking out to sea, mysterious, your poem and intriguingly Written Laurie. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Oh yes, I've seen the secluded place where Dillon Thomas wrote his poetry, it's on a high place overlooking the sea in Wales, UK, a beautiful spoke looking out to sea, mysterious, your poem and intriguingly Written Laurie. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2025
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Sorry, Roy, I thought I'd already replied to your review, but FS tells me otherwise. Thank you so much for stopping to read me the other day. I truly appreciate it!
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Most welcome Laurie
