T'was Fate
A misunderstanding sealed their fate2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is so enjoyable to read. I love how you use rhyme to give it that anxious feel - just like the tragedy of Romeo and Juliet! That final stanza is perfect. Really well done!
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Your poem is so enjoyable to read. I love how you use rhyme to give it that anxious feel - just like the tragedy of Romeo and Juliet! That final stanza is perfect. Really well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
Comment from Jessa kuder
the last lines didn't all rhyme. I feel that might hurt your chances in the competition. I can respect how hard it is to find that many exact rhymes. I enjoyed the poem its self. good luck
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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the last lines didn't all rhyme. I feel that might hurt your chances in the competition. I can respect how hard it is to find that many exact rhymes. I enjoyed the poem its self. good luck
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Are you referring to the verbs ending in ed
Like clashed, slashed, stashed etc ??
What about this version all in the present tense
Their story starts with a sudden pash
Her cheeks blush when their lips clash
To wed, though blessed, is a step too rash
Their families cop the harsh backlash
Brash youths , thrusting swords that slash
Too many lives cut down in a flash
Even our lovers ‘ dreams turn to ash
A misunderstanding causes the Friar’s plan to crash
Romeo drinks the poison he has hidden in his sash
And the lass stabs herself , a mortal gash
