Cicada Watch
a Monorhyme poem15 total reviews
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
I am a big fan of cicadas and have even worked on some music for them. Your piece got my vote. It is well metered and I liked your descriptions.
It might be worth extending your piece a bit. Maybe 4 more lines to make it an even 16? I've done two pieces a bit like this one before, one about fireflies, buried deep in my portfolio. There are a lot of additional words that work with your rhymes.
Good luck with the voting (I just got you up to 4, in second).
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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I am a big fan of cicadas and have even worked on some music for them. Your piece got my vote. It is well metered and I liked your descriptions.
It might be worth extending your piece a bit. Maybe 4 more lines to make it an even 16? I've done two pieces a bit like this one before, one about fireflies, buried deep in my portfolio. There are a lot of additional words that work with your rhymes.
Good luck with the voting (I just got you up to 4, in second).
🦍
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Harambe, for your praise of my poem and your vote. I had thought of extending the poem, but the choice of GOOD rhymes is limited and I did not want to repeat myself.
Comment from Harry Craft
Lol! Great poem about a cicada. A perfect photo to go with the poem as well. It rhymed very well and it flowed smoothly also. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Lol! Great poem about a cicada. A perfect photo to go with the poem as well. It rhymed very well and it flowed smoothly also. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, Harry, for the high praise of my poem.
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You are so welcome Rod.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have two votes.
I spend a lot of time observing insects, I find them interesting.
My favourite is spiders spinning their web, it's a fascinating watch.
In summer I put a piece of meat or chicken on a saucer and while I eat, I watch the wasps come and feed on the meat.
They now and then come around my hand to thank me. They are smart and sense I mean no harm.
Now you know why I gave you my vote.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have two votes.
I spend a lot of time observing insects, I find them interesting.
My favourite is spiders spinning their web, it's a fascinating watch.
In summer I put a piece of meat or chicken on a saucer and while I eat, I watch the wasps come and feed on the meat.
They now and then come around my hand to thank me. They are smart and sense I mean no harm.
Now you know why I gave you my vote.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2025
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Oh, tempeste, I truly appreciate your endorsing my poem with your vote. I like to watch butterflies the most, especially if there are several flitting around the garden.
Comment from nancyjam
Your descriptive poem is a great entrain the mono rhyme contest.
Each line makes sense and has perfect end rhyme. I love the description of the cicada's movement along the leaf.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Your descriptive poem is a great entrain the mono rhyme contest.
Each line makes sense and has perfect end rhyme. I love the description of the cicada's movement along the leaf.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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So pleased you enjoyed my poem, Nancy. Many thanks for your kind words.
Comment from Chris Davies
Your poem is very cleverly done. I enjoyed reading it and wish you all the best in the contest. I loved the way you kept to the monorhyme scheme. What fun!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Your poem is very cleverly done. I enjoyed reading it and wish you all the best in the contest. I loved the way you kept to the monorhyme scheme. What fun!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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So pleased you enjoyed my poem, Chris. Many thanks for your kind words.
Comment from June Sargent
This is a cute monorhyme about the cicada that flows smoothly and naturally. It doesn't feel awkward or contrived. And it paints a picture of these, little critters returning to either serenade, or, irritate us.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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This is a cute monorhyme about the cicada that flows smoothly and naturally. It doesn't feel awkward or contrived. And it paints a picture of these, little critters returning to either serenade, or, irritate us.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, June, for your praising "Cicada Watch." I never enjoyed listening to their incessant buzz, but I was amused by their erratic flights.
Comment from Aiona
This poem made me giggle. Especially the last two lines. The poem fits the Monorhyme prompt as every single line has the same end rhyme. I was a little confused by this one line that doesn't seem to fit.
I'm not sure why "It did not seem to want to stay." and yet other lines indicate it is staying put, such as "Six legs held fast, refused to stray."
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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This poem made me giggle. Especially the last two lines. The poem fits the Monorhyme prompt as every single line has the same end rhyme. I was a little confused by this one line that doesn't seem to fit.
I'm not sure why "It did not seem to want to stay." and yet other lines indicate it is staying put, such as "Six legs held fast, refused to stray."
Comment Written 23-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Aiona, for your kind words and for taking the time to express your concerns.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I liked this poem about the cicadas once I was getting on a bus when the bus driver told me I had a hitchiker - cicada was sitting on my bag. I shook him off and he flew off and the bus driver laughed.
This summer some resturants in the East Coast are talking about serving cicada's on the menu why not I say? people in other countries like Korea eat fried grasshoppers and crickets.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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I liked this poem about the cicadas once I was getting on a bus when the bus driver told me I had a hitchiker - cicada was sitting on my bag. I shook him off and he flew off and the bus driver laughed.
This summer some resturants in the East Coast are talking about serving cicada's on the menu why not I say? people in other countries like Korea eat fried grasshoppers and crickets.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Jake. I am delighted you like my poem. Last summer you could not evade the cicadas and dogs got sick if they date them.
Comment from Wendy G
Very nicely done monorhyme - the rhymes were smooth and appropriate, as you described the approach of the cicada, desribed it and its activity thoughtfully and finished with a gentle warning to it not to become prey for birds. I enjoyed your careful observation of the small things of nature. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Very nicely done monorhyme - the rhymes were smooth and appropriate, as you described the approach of the cicada, desribed it and its activity thoughtfully and finished with a gentle warning to it not to become prey for birds. I enjoyed your careful observation of the small things of nature. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Wendy, for the great review. So glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from jessizero
I admired your monorhyme poem. I think you picked a great topic for this piece. It was fun, I think. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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I admired your monorhyme poem. I think you picked a great topic for this piece. It was fun, I think. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2025
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Thank you very much, Jessi, for your kind words.
