The Vanished Hour
Oh, for that lost hour on that first morning.3 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your Daylight Saving verse certainly gets the point over with the dreadful stress of losing that precious hour on one's first day. You've rhymed well according to the prompt and presented this theme with fun and horror wrapped into one, together with a relatable plea to Congress to take their 'hands' off things and leave well alone. A little confused about the syntax of the last line of stanza 2. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Your Daylight Saving verse certainly gets the point over with the dreadful stress of losing that precious hour on one's first day. You've rhymed well according to the prompt and presented this theme with fun and horror wrapped into one, together with a relatable plea to Congress to take their 'hands' off things and leave well alone. A little confused about the syntax of the last line of stanza 2. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2025
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Thank you for taking the time to read and to review. I will check last line.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge. There is good imagery and there are clear descriptions. Many readers will relate to this.
Best wishes
Alex
A grammar note:
Sprang is incorrect.
sprung
past and past participle of spring
More from Merriam-Webster on sprung
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge. There is good imagery and there are clear descriptions. Many readers will relate to this.
Best wishes
Alex
A grammar note:
Sprang is incorrect.
sprung
past and past participle of spring
More from Merriam-Webster on sprung
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the review. Appreciated.
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You're welcome!
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Thanks for the correction.
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You're welcome! People help me, too. :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought your poem perfectly shared the frustration of losing an hour to daylight saving time! I love the flow your poem - - it really brings out that groggy morning feeling. The way you built up the frustration was great.
That last line made me smile! Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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I thought your poem perfectly shared the frustration of losing an hour to daylight saving time! I love the flow your poem - - it really brings out that groggy morning feeling. The way you built up the frustration was great.
That last line made me smile! Well done!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2025
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Thanks for the read and review. Appreciated.
