Trusting Soul
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Carol,
This is a well rhymed and smoothly metered poem which tells of a partner you thought was a true love but was found not to be. A little too late not to break your heart.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Hi Carol,
This is a well rhymed and smoothly metered poem which tells of a partner you thought was a true love but was found not to be. A little too late not to break your heart.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2025
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Our heart always wants to believe the best of something, but it doesn't always end up that way. Putting our trust and love in someone can often be betrayed.
Smiles, Carol
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This is so true, Carol.
Joan
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an emotional poem about blind eyes that see what they need to see rather than what is actually there. My favorite line, and turning point in the poem is, "And found a stranger cloaked in you."
You have crafted the perfect example of betrayal. Best wishes in the contest.
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This is an emotional poem about blind eyes that see what they need to see rather than what is actually there. My favorite line, and turning point in the poem is, "And found a stranger cloaked in you."
You have crafted the perfect example of betrayal. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a great picture of one who draws us close, then deceives us and betrays us. I think we all know someone like this. Nice job on the rhymes, and your meter is steady throughout. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
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This is a great picture of one who draws us close, then deceives us and betrays us. I think we all know someone like this. Nice job on the rhymes, and your meter is steady throughout. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
Comment from Harry Craft
Wow Carol! No matter what you write - it is very good lol! I really enjoyed reading this poem. The rhyming scheme was very good and the meaning as well. I truly love that photo too! Keep up the great work!
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Wow Carol! No matter what you write - it is very good lol! I really enjoyed reading this poem. The rhyming scheme was very good and the meaning as well. I truly love that photo too! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is good, Carole. It was a little dark for me in the background but your well chosen words and teardrop photo presentation, truly kept my attention and intrrest. The ending was a bit of a surprise for me. You have a talent for interesting endings. Best wishes!
Smiles,
Alex :)
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This is good, Carole. It was a little dark for me in the background but your well chosen words and teardrop photo presentation, truly kept my attention and intrrest. The ending was a bit of a surprise for me. You have a talent for interesting endings. Best wishes!
Smiles,
Alex :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
Comment from Arabellesmom
Amazing job! Amazing writing and amazing poem. I can relate to your poem very much so in understanding your well written words. Five stars you deserve!!!!
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Amazing job! Amazing writing and amazing poem. I can relate to your poem very much so in understanding your well written words. Five stars you deserve!!!!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Sister,
Look at you go girl you said you couldn't write poetry. This is a really good entry for the contest. You are so talented. How are the book sales coming along?
Well done my friend and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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Sister,
Look at you go girl you said you couldn't write poetry. This is a really good entry for the contest. You are so talented. How are the book sales coming along?
Well done my friend and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
Comment from nancyjam
Your poem illustrates betrayal so well and should do well in the contest.
it's a sad tale when someone you trust turns out not to be loving or kind.
Your rhyme and meter are strong. Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
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Your poem illustrates betrayal so well and should do well in the contest.
it's a sad tale when someone you trust turns out not to be loving or kind.
Your rhyme and meter are strong. Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Some time we trust someone who seems familiar and seems interested in our welfare. Then we discover they don't have our happiness in mind and aren't the person we hoped they were.
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Some time we trust someone who seems familiar and seems interested in our welfare. Then we discover they don't have our happiness in mind and aren't the person we hoped they were.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
Comment from Wendy G
It's interetsting that dangerous people often present themselves as friends first, deception being their goal in order to win trust. Your poem expresses this very well, and the betrayal at the end is shocking and startling. Well said. My only other comment is that it is very hard to read. Maybe a lighter background or else change the writing to white. But I know you wanted to make it eerie and frightening and incorporate the colours of darkness and death. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
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It's interetsting that dangerous people often present themselves as friends first, deception being their goal in order to win trust. Your poem expresses this very well, and the betrayal at the end is shocking and startling. Well said. My only other comment is that it is very hard to read. Maybe a lighter background or else change the writing to white. But I know you wanted to make it eerie and frightening and incorporate the colours of darkness and death. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
