Ben Paul Persons
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another soul saved by faith and the journey continues Ben Paul is following his father steps talking to people in distress. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Another soul saved by faith and the journey continues Ben Paul is following his father steps talking to people in distress. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much for your kind review and well wishes.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I like the way you weave history and geography into your writing.I like the way you blend the past and the present. I do see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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This is another excellent chapter. I like the way you weave history and geography into your writing.I like the way you blend the past and the present. I do see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much for all your comments. I'm greatly encouraged.
Comment from lyenochka
You and your wife are wonderful and creative travelers. Thank you for sharing about how twi writers people-watch!
Great info on Alaska. Now I am a bit worried about how they are already having to deal with the law so soon after arriving.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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You and your wife are wonderful and creative travelers. Thank you for sharing about how twi writers people-watch!
Great info on Alaska. Now I am a bit worried about how they are already having to deal with the law so soon after arriving.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you. At least Ben Paul is not accused of anything this time.
I'm unfamiliar with 'twi' writers. (Writers in their twilight years?)
Thanks again.
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😂 That "twi" was a typo or Autocorrect got really creative!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ben Paul and Sylvia enjoy their train ride, but there is more going on than that. Ben Paul needed to walk around the train and, therefore, saw too much for a killer to hid. Sadly, Ben Paul's muse didn't help him save her life.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Ben Paul and Sylvia enjoy their train ride, but there is more going on than that. Ben Paul needed to walk around the train and, therefore, saw too much for a killer to hid. Sadly, Ben Paul's muse didn't help him save her life.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Sadly for the poor girl who should have known better than to go off on a trip with Mr. Trouble.
Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Jim Wile
Another adventure for Ben Paul and Sylvia is about to begin. This time at least they won't be blamed for the crime! I loved Ben Paul's powers of observation. He certainly takes everything in. He would have made a great detective.
I also enjoyed the bit of Alaskan travelogue and revisiting the story of how Ben Persons ended up killing Soapy Smith but unfortunately being killed himself in the act. This was an enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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Another adventure for Ben Paul and Sylvia is about to begin. This time at least they won't be blamed for the crime! I loved Ben Paul's powers of observation. He certainly takes everything in. He would have made a great detective.
I also enjoyed the bit of Alaskan travelogue and revisiting the story of how Ben Persons ended up killing Soapy Smith but unfortunately being killed himself in the act. This was an enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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Thank you! I appreciate your very nice review.
Comment from Jacob1395
This is another engaging chapter, Wayne. I loved the detail you included about the setting which I thought was really engaging. I would just suggest one thing, try not to rely too much on dialogue as too much dialogue does make it feel more like a script. That's just my opinion of course. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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This is another engaging chapter, Wayne. I loved the detail you included about the setting which I thought was really engaging. I would just suggest one thing, try not to rely too much on dialogue as too much dialogue does make it feel more like a script. That's just my opinion of course. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the review and comment about dialogue. It's always good to be aware of the overall presentation.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Thanks for the mini history lesson. I actually remember when we took control of Alaska; I was in kindergarten, and my teacher told us about it. I don't remember her words, but I remember that she was very excited about it.
Was it '67? I wasn't in kindergarten in '67. I thought we bought it in the late 50s.
But how do we know that the woman is dead and thrown off the train? She hasn't called home, but no one said there was a body.
The moral of the story as I see it is to always be aware of your surroundings. Ben Paul and Sylvia certainly always are, and will be able to help the deputy.
We'll learn more next time, I expect:-)
xo
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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Thanks for the mini history lesson. I actually remember when we took control of Alaska; I was in kindergarten, and my teacher told us about it. I don't remember her words, but I remember that she was very excited about it.
Was it '67? I wasn't in kindergarten in '67. I thought we bought it in the late 50s.
But how do we know that the woman is dead and thrown off the train? She hasn't called home, but no one said there was a body.
The moral of the story as I see it is to always be aware of your surroundings. Ben Paul and Sylvia certainly always are, and will be able to help the deputy.
We'll learn more next time, I expect:-)
xo
Comment Written 27-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2025
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We bought Alaska in 1867. It became a state in 1959, the same year as Hawaii.
All we know is that the girl is missing with strong evidence that she was on the train.
Thank you for your very kind review.
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It became a state in 1959 - that's why my teacher used it for a "lesson". Thanks.
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting to learn a bit about Alaska. Another adventure here, but an unfortunate and unpleasant one. Ben Paul is very observant and intuitive.
Well done.
Wendy
Edit: Alaska's capitol. (capital)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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Interesting to learn a bit about Alaska. Another adventure here, but an unfortunate and unpleasant one. Ben Paul is very observant and intuitive.
Well done.
Wendy
Edit: Alaska's capitol. (capital)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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Thank you. I can't believe I made such a bone head mistake their.
smiley face here
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Wayne,
This is a great addition to your book. Ben Paul sure has a heightened awareness of his surrounds. To notice someone among several customers. He's do the Lord's work.
Well done
Cecilia
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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Wayne,
This is a great addition to your book. Ben Paul sure has a heightened awareness of his surrounds. To notice someone among several customers. He's do the Lord's work.
Well done
Cecilia
Comment Written 26-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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Thank you. I appreciate your very nice review.
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
It's good to see you write serialised novels of itinerant Christian ministers such as Ben Persons and his Great grandson Ben Paul, ministry does run in families, and this is as an authentic enactment of the ministry that takes one where God calls you to go. I experienced some of this in the days of my gospel singing days. Ben Paul is back in His grandfather's territory, Alaska at the moment, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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It's good to see you write serialised novels of itinerant Christian ministers such as Ben Persons and his Great grandson Ben Paul, ministry does run in families, and this is as an authentic enactment of the ministry that takes one where God calls you to go. I experienced some of this in the days of my gospel singing days. Ben Paul is back in His grandfather's territory, Alaska at the moment, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025
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Thank you for reviewing.
(Only, Ben Paul is Ben's son, born in 1890. The year in the story is 1973.)
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Thanks for the correction.
