Mother
Where would we be without them?4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is the 2D acrostic that hits the spot for me. Perfectly compliant with the brief, it expands on its subject with strong as well as tender, descriptive detail, illustrating the complexities and magnitude of the role of motherhood. Very well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is the 2D acrostic that hits the spot for me. Perfectly compliant with the brief, it expands on its subject with strong as well as tender, descriptive detail, illustrating the complexities and magnitude of the role of motherhood. Very well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Much appreciated, Debbie.
Comment from Sallyo
Brilliant! I was going to have a go at this format and decided it was too complicated. You, oh mystery poet, have mastered it beautifully. I hope some others enter so I can see more examples. I love complicated forms, but this one is a rhyme-too-far for me. Glad it wasn't for you.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Brilliant! I was going to have a go at this format and decided it was too complicated. You, oh mystery poet, have mastered it beautifully. I hope some others enter so I can see more examples. I love complicated forms, but this one is a rhyme-too-far for me. Glad it wasn't for you.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Sallyo. Appreciated.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! Certainly a challenging form you've completed here... Great use of descriptors and actions to complete the picture of a mother's love! Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Wow! Certainly a challenging form you've completed here... Great use of descriptors and actions to complete the picture of a mother's love! Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from SimianSavant
A formidable first entry in the contest likely to be a serious competitor in the voting, this is eloquently and smoothly penned. It couldn't be more different from your previous 2D acrostic entry, hahaha. I like that you wrapped the first three lines into each other, which prevents this from feeling blocky, as is often common from less experienced acrostic writers. Well done!
A couple ideas:
hugging, embracing -- redundant. Consider some other h words like helping, healing.
I think if you wanted to, you could also turn the second half into one continuous sentence just by swapping out some periods (no pun intended). This would add a bit of smoothness to the piece.
Best regards,
🦍
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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A formidable first entry in the contest likely to be a serious competitor in the voting, this is eloquently and smoothly penned. It couldn't be more different from your previous 2D acrostic entry, hahaha. I like that you wrapped the first three lines into each other, which prevents this from feeling blocky, as is often common from less experienced acrostic writers. Well done!
A couple ideas:
hugging, embracing -- redundant. Consider some other h words like helping, healing.
I think if you wanted to, you could also turn the second half into one continuous sentence just by swapping out some periods (no pun intended). This would add a bit of smoothness to the piece.
Best regards,
🦍
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Terrific. Great suggestions.