Danger is my business
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Incommunicado"Most everything Mickey did was dangerous.
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Comment from Maria Millsaps
Thank you for sharing, sorry to hear of the struggle your brother is experiencing. Congrats on your milestone. Read your content outloud and make minor corrections.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you for sharing, sorry to hear of the struggle your brother is experiencing. Congrats on your milestone. Read your content outloud and make minor corrections.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your alert review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is incredibly detailed and interesting. I appreciate how it shows the challenges of mental health. You also capture that sense of relief as things begin to turn around. The moments of struggle - like the phone situation - are so well done.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is incredibly detailed and interesting. I appreciate how it shows the challenges of mental health. You also capture that sense of relief as things begin to turn around. The moments of struggle - like the phone situation - are so well done.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your supportive review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, incompetence seems to be prevalent with so many businesses these days (like WalMart three times...ugh!). And those 'caretakers"... hmmm. :-( But the trips certainly made for a great chapter this time... Looking forward to keeping up with reading about Mike! Have a great week ahead! :-) Yvette
the wall So when --> the wall. So when
one of their patience. --> one of their patients.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Yes, incompetence seems to be prevalent with so many businesses these days (like WalMart three times...ugh!). And those 'caretakers"... hmmm. :-( But the trips certainly made for a great chapter this time... Looking forward to keeping up with reading about Mike! Have a great week ahead! :-) Yvette
the wall So when --> the wall. So when
one of their patience. --> one of their patients.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the compassionate insightful review. I will attend to those issues right now.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It is great your brother finally got a working phone. You really need to remember to proofread your writing. I think (it was the last time) his caretaker locked him out of his house that you are referring to. You have forgotten several periods throughout this tale of his misadventure. I am sure if you read it carefully you will catch and correct these errors.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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It is great your brother finally got a working phone. You really need to remember to proofread your writing. I think (it was the last time) his caretaker locked him out of his house that you are referring to. You have forgotten several periods throughout this tale of his misadventure. I am sure if you read it carefully you will catch and correct these errors.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your alert review. I will definitely attend to this.
Comment from Begin Again
Writing f rom the heart and knowing key aspects of the situation because of your brother and you working to help him is a perfect reason to write this story. I am sure that you will help others when they see themselves in it too.
congratulations on the milestone!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Writing f rom the heart and knowing key aspects of the situation because of your brother and you working to help him is a perfect reason to write this story. I am sure that you will help others when they see themselves in it too.
congratulations on the milestone!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate and encouraging review
Comment from lyenochka
Congrats on your 300th post, Liz. This and all that you are tending to is in itself a feat! You did cover about the first half of this in the previous chapter. Thank the Lord that he didn't have an emergency when he had no working phone. This will be a huge help for him!
A few suggestions:
I don't know what else [went?] into the sink.
The other sink had a lot of drink bottle empty drink bottles in it. (remove first 'drink bottle')
So when I got up to my brothers hoping (brother's)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Congrats on your 300th post, Liz. This and all that you are tending to is in itself a feat! You did cover about the first half of this in the previous chapter. Thank the Lord that he didn't have an emergency when he had no working phone. This will be a huge help for him!
A few suggestions:
I don't know what else [went?] into the sink.
The other sink had a lot of drink bottle empty drink bottles in it. (remove first 'drink bottle')
So when I got up to my brothers hoping (brother's)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your insightful review I have attended to those punctuations. It's nice having you on board here Helen it's very comforting.
Comment from jim vecchio
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR MILESTONE POST!!! I wish I had a six now. In my work as a Program Coordinator, I found there were good staff and bad staff. Fortunately, we got rid of most four bad staff. There were a couple of
grammatical errors. Once you clean them up, it will be perfect. The first paragraph is missing some words. ." The other sink had a lot of drink bottle empty drink bottles in it"-one too many drinks!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR MILESTONE POST!!! I wish I had a six now. In my work as a Program Coordinator, I found there were good staff and bad staff. Fortunately, we got rid of most four bad staff. There were a couple of
grammatical errors. Once you clean them up, it will be perfect. The first paragraph is missing some words. ." The other sink had a lot of drink bottle empty drink bottles in it"-one too many drinks!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your insightful review I have attended to the punctuations.
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Have a Blessed weekend!
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you also
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I'll look for your words in the post here!
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thank you...how are you by the way? I've been kind of out of it, going up to my brother's
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God blesses me every day. I was feeling fine but for unknown reasons yesterday I had three nosebleeds and my blood pressure was up a little. I was not feeling bad, but a bit tired. I feel better today, thank you.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written story for your 300th milestone post and I enjoyed very much listening to it. You are a very good writer and you share some very personal things. Have a blessed day and a wonderful weekend.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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This is a very well written story for your 300th milestone post and I enjoyed very much listening to it. You are a very good writer and you share some very personal things. Have a blessed day and a wonderful weekend.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review I'm glad you are enjoying my story.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 300 milestone post. Please don't feel uncomfortable writing this. It will help many people in similar situations.
Mike said. She only lives a half hour away (not sure why 'Mike said.' is here, the following isn't dialogue.)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Congratulations on your 300 milestone post. Please don't feel uncomfortable writing this. It will help many people in similar situations.
Mike said. She only lives a half hour away (not sure why 'Mike said.' is here, the following isn't dialogue.)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your alert review i have modified.
