My love
Written for the most wonderful woman I know2 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
A lovely poem that you have written for your wife I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best in the contest that you have a wonderful week and make God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
  |
A lovely poem that you have written for your wife I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best in the contest that you have a wonderful week and make God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
-
Thank you very much I am so happy you enjoyed it
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of a deep, heartfelt love. The way you express your feelings, from the joy of seeing your loved one's smile to the appreciation for the happiness they've brought into your life, is truly touching. The sentiment of wanting to hold and cherish your partner is conveyed with warmth and sincerity.
One suggestion would be varying the length of your lines can add more emphasis and rhythm, so perhaps "Every second of every day" could be simplified to "Every second, every day" to keep the rhythm steady.
Overall, your poem has a lovely, personal touch that makes it feel genuine and heartfelt. With just a few tweaks, it can become even more fluid and expressive, perfectly capturing the essence of your affection and gratitude.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
|
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of a deep, heartfelt love. The way you express your feelings, from the joy of seeing your loved one's smile to the appreciation for the happiness they've brought into your life, is truly touching. The sentiment of wanting to hold and cherish your partner is conveyed with warmth and sincerity.
One suggestion would be varying the length of your lines can add more emphasis and rhythm, so perhaps "Every second of every day" could be simplified to "Every second, every day" to keep the rhythm steady.
Overall, your poem has a lovely, personal touch that makes it feel genuine and heartfelt. With just a few tweaks, it can become even more fluid and expressive, perfectly capturing the essence of your affection and gratitude.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
-
Thank you so much I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I really appreciate your feedback and I have edited the line you suggested.
