One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from aryr
A fantastic Katauta Poem, Gypsy. I certainly enjoyed the dual pictures. Your words were phenomenal because they dwelt on the strawman. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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A fantastic Katauta Poem, Gypsy. I certainly enjoyed the dual pictures. Your words were phenomenal because they dwelt on the strawman. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem, I really appreciate it. blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem gives feeling to the straw man. I like that. I do wish the crow would not have left. The straw man is sad. The artwork you chose is perfect. Once again you gave us a wonderful package to enjoy.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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This poem gives feeling to the straw man. I like that. I do wish the crow would not have left. The straw man is sad. The artwork you chose is perfect. Once again you gave us a wonderful package to enjoy.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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I appreciate your kind and helpful review. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was reminiscent of the strawman in the wizard of Oz. At least for me. He had no brain yet made friends with all he met. This strawman seems no different. Very moving poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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This was reminiscent of the strawman in the wizard of Oz. At least for me. He had no brain yet made friends with all he met. This strawman seems no different. Very moving poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
"Allow nature's peace to flow into you as sunshine flows into trees." - John Muir
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your katauta poem/ -! Good picture presentation of the straw man- good syllable count and flow-
Good satori- teardrop in the straw man's eye - left behind- Good job AP
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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I like your katauta poem/ -! Good picture presentation of the straw man- good syllable count and flow-
Good satori- teardrop in the straw man's eye - left behind- Good job AP
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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I wasn't happy with it and rewrote it.
Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
"Allow nature's peace to flow into you as sunshine flows into trees." - John Muir
Comment from lyenochka
Seems like the "strawman" wasn't very good at his job as a scare crow. It seems the crow was quite comfortable spending time with him and only left him behind when he wanted. But the raindrop makes us think that the straw man misses him.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Seems like the "strawman" wasn't very good at his job as a scare crow. It seems the crow was quite comfortable spending time with him and only left him behind when he wanted. But the raindrop makes us think that the straw man misses him.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.
Love,
Marival
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Gypsy Queen,
if only the crow hadn't 'picked' the straw man's brain to find out who he really was?
The raindrop on the straw man's eye... his knowing, 'the ruse is up'... nothing but padding... another empty man with little substance to his existence. Yes, a very old tale.
Striking presentation!
We know the crow will be back, straw is a great nesting material.
Very haunting quote!
With our thoughts we create...
empty expectations.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Hi Gypsy Queen,
if only the crow hadn't 'picked' the straw man's brain to find out who he really was?
The raindrop on the straw man's eye... his knowing, 'the ruse is up'... nothing but padding... another empty man with little substance to his existence. Yes, a very old tale.
Striking presentation!
We know the crow will be back, straw is a great nesting material.
Very haunting quote!
With our thoughts we create...
empty expectations.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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James,
I wasn't happy with it so i rewrote it. You cant win them all.
...sigh....
Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback. I hope you and Jade have a lovely weekend.
Gypsy hugs
"Allow nature's peace to flow into you as sunshine flows into trees." - John Muir
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Fly Crow Fly!
This is a very powerful poem. Straw men are men made of straw. The Crow stays in the cornfield only until she knows wings can carry here away. The Crow transforms and rebuilds. The straw man however just becomes an old straw man.
Alexan xx
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Fly Crow Fly!
This is a very powerful poem. Straw men are men made of straw. The Crow stays in the cornfield only until she knows wings can carry here away. The Crow transforms and rebuilds. The straw man however just becomes an old straw man.
Alexan xx
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback, alexan.
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome, Gypsy!
Comment from shelley kaye
if only he had a brain... maybe the crow would've stayed LOL
cute katauta and scarecrow pic
good syllable count and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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if only he had a brain... maybe the crow would've stayed LOL
cute katauta and scarecrow pic
good syllable count and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback, Shelley.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
We saw our 2nd youngest grandson perform in the Wizard of Oz, a couple of weeks ago, the straw was, of course a favourite, in fact I wrote a poem to the time of "If I had a brain" but being in love with a crow, I didn't know that!, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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We saw our 2nd youngest grandson perform in the Wizard of Oz, a couple of weeks ago, the straw was, of course a favourite, in fact I wrote a poem to the time of "If I had a brain" but being in love with a crow, I didn't know that!, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback, Roy.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from Paul Manton
Thanks for enlightening me once again, Gypsy. I wasn't aware that this form was called Katauta. Another gem gathered.
I am treading carefully here because I have used Oz as an iconic theme in several poems - but (I hesitate to say this) I guess we're not in Kansas anymore. But the meaning? This is certainly the most enigmatic poem I have seen on this site.
The crow (symbol of death?) takes off from the enchanted poppy field to fly back to his mistress, who thinks she has foiled Dorothy's attempt to reach the Emerald City. Now the guesswork: if the water on the Straw man's eye is (as you say) a raindrop, then it could be the harbinger of the snow which Glinda will send to reverse the narcotic coma induced by the poppies.
AND if that is so, then your wonderful Katauta poem is about HOPE and I claim the cigar. Or I am completely wrong and am carried away by a flying monkey!
Thanks for a lovely puzzle to solve.
Paul
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks for enlightening me once again, Gypsy. I wasn't aware that this form was called Katauta. Another gem gathered.
I am treading carefully here because I have used Oz as an iconic theme in several poems - but (I hesitate to say this) I guess we're not in Kansas anymore. But the meaning? This is certainly the most enigmatic poem I have seen on this site.
The crow (symbol of death?) takes off from the enchanted poppy field to fly back to his mistress, who thinks she has foiled Dorothy's attempt to reach the Emerald City. Now the guesswork: if the water on the Straw man's eye is (as you say) a raindrop, then it could be the harbinger of the snow which Glinda will send to reverse the narcotic coma induced by the poppies.
AND if that is so, then your wonderful Katauta poem is about HOPE and I claim the cigar. Or I am completely wrong and am carried away by a flying monkey!
Thanks for a lovely puzzle to solve.
Paul
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Hahaha, holy cow, Paul, you have an amazing imagination. One of the beauties of haiku, and other Japanese poetic forms, is that the satori may mean different things to different people. To me, the straw man is in love with the crow. The raindrop signifies a tear.
But it can totally be about the Wizard of Oz. ;)
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback, Paul.
Gypsy hugs
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Imagination is everything, Gypsy. I don't smoke cigars anymore, so it hardly matters.
A straw man in love with a crow? And you think I am imaginative?
Hmm.
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hahaha... yes, i am very imaginative
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hahaha... yes, i am very imaginative
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Both of us.
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