One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Faith Williams
A poem (even prose) which brings alive all the senses is such an enjoyable read. I wish I had six stars to give you! Your new form is delightful, and I will have to give it a try. I liked the first stanza and the line about 'feeling the sunshine of your soul'. The cool sea breeze evokes a wonderful image in my mind--I love the beach. And the dual meaning of 'tucking in' in the third stanza is great. A wonderful poem, Gypsy. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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A poem (even prose) which brings alive all the senses is such an enjoyable read. I wish I had six stars to give you! Your new form is delightful, and I will have to give it a try. I liked the first stanza and the line about 'feeling the sunshine of your soul'. The cool sea breeze evokes a wonderful image in my mind--I love the beach. And the dual meaning of 'tucking in' in the third stanza is great. A wonderful poem, Gypsy. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and write the exceptional review. I hope you try it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful form of poetry, involving all the senses in a beautiful day had by lovers, rhyme in the last stanza is excellent, so many very descriptive words in this read, very well presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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What a wonderful form of poetry, involving all the senses in a beautiful day had by lovers, rhyme in the last stanza is excellent, so many very descriptive words in this read, very well presented****kahpot
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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I didn't mean to rhyme but sometimes it happens naturally.
I appreciate your kind words and exceptional six stars review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This poem gives clear image of fun at sunset. You don't mention the specific senses but you have touch in the feel of the wind and sun.
And hearing in the giggling. Sight is throughout the poem. Taste and smell can be the food and wine,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of your week
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Hi MariVal,
This poem gives clear image of fun at sunset. You don't mention the specific senses but you have touch in the feel of the wind and sun.
And hearing in the giggling. Sight is throughout the poem. Taste and smell can be the food and wine,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of your week
Joan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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The poem requires 5 senses and I covered them all.
Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
This was a great 'five senses' poem, it definitely covered all the senses, Gypsy. I really liked the dual pictures, they brought a sense of calmness. Your words covered all the senses. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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This was a great 'five senses' poem, it definitely covered all the senses, Gypsy. I really liked the dual pictures, they brought a sense of calmness. Your words covered all the senses. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Ulla
Aw, Marival this poem is so beautifully written, and encompasses all the five senses and so beautifully so. I don't have a six to give, but I wished I did. Un abrazo, Ulla xx
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Aw, Marival this poem is so beautifully written, and encompasses all the five senses and so beautifully so. I don't have a six to give, but I wished I did. Un abrazo, Ulla xx
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Ulla,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
One again you managed not only a great poem that touches on all five senses, but you placed this amazing poem in a perfect package. Great job once again. I am honored to be a fan of yours.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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One again you managed not only a great poem that touches on all five senses, but you placed this amazing poem in a perfect package. Great job once again. I am honored to be a fan of yours.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Barbara,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another desire is out of control poem, Gypsy----tis a great poetic form you've invented. I've invented one of my own; the sad-sack has no chance style!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Another desire is out of control poem, Gypsy----tis a great poetic form you've invented. I've invented one of my own; the sad-sack has no chance style!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Mike,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is a challenge to cover sight, touch, smell, taste, and hearing.
Sight ( sun)
touch, ( caress)
smell, taste, ( dinner)
hearing, (breeze)
Well done. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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It is a challenge to cover sight, touch, smell, taste, and hearing.
Sight ( sun)
touch, ( caress)
smell, taste, ( dinner)
hearing, (breeze)
Well done. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh love senses poems - will definitely have to try this out!
love a cool sea breeze - the feeling, the aroma - everything!
great poem! thank you for sharing :-)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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ooh love senses poems - will definitely have to try this out!
love a cool sea breeze - the feeling, the aroma - everything!
great poem! thank you for sharing :-)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Shelley,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
I'm going to use this new form for our Japanese poetry club. Eventhough is not from Japan, it has the same elements of syllable counting and imagery.
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review.
Gypsy hugs
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Comment from Paul Manton
Obviously worth the 6stars I don't possess! Very assured, very beautiful, faultless phrasing and perfectly paced.
The graphics are superbly designed, the font and its changing colors enhances and carries the words very effectively.
And then the message itself - not only passes through all the senses, but (I'm not surprised to say) engages us in synesthesia several times.
It is a pleasure to review the work of a professional writer.
Thank you, Gypsy.
Paul
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Obviously worth the 6stars I don't possess! Very assured, very beautiful, faultless phrasing and perfectly paced.
The graphics are superbly designed, the font and its changing colors enhances and carries the words very effectively.
And then the message itself - not only passes through all the senses, but (I'm not surprised to say) engages us in synesthesia several times.
It is a pleasure to review the work of a professional writer.
Thank you, Gypsy.
Paul
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Paul,
Thank you very much for your kind words and exceptional five stars review. I appreciate your detailed feedback. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs