Honoring others
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
It is so wonderful to have friends who stand behind us and beside us. It doesn't seem fair that someone so generous should suffer such such a treacherous accident. Sending her healing on all levels and courage and endurance.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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It is so wonderful to have friends who stand behind us and beside us. It doesn't seem fair that someone so generous should suffer such such a treacherous accident. Sending her healing on all levels and courage and endurance.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Oh Liz , you are so sweet and have such a big heart too! I thank you so much for your kind words for Lisa and the poem.
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***Warm hugs***
Comment from Write Right Writer
Debi...
What a lovely and fitting tribute to your neighbor and friend, Lisa. I particularly liked you title-worthy refrain and the way you used it so effectively as a final capstone for each stanza of your poem.
Heartfelt. Authentic. Touching. Well done.
Curt (WRW)
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Debi...
What a lovely and fitting tribute to your neighbor and friend, Lisa. I particularly liked you title-worthy refrain and the way you used it so effectively as a final capstone for each stanza of your poem.
Heartfelt. Authentic. Touching. Well done.
Curt (WRW)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautiful poem for your friend Lisa. The text is a good size, but for me it could be one size larger. The word recover is misspelled here) revover from her surgery.
Your message is solid as a stone. and clearly stated. I hope you shared this poem with her.
The visual fits perfectly, and she actually glows in it. I would go to the last line and hit enter once more so your poem's spacing at top and bottom is the same. Thanks for sharing this poem. It was fun reading about Lisa.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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This is a beautiful poem for your friend Lisa. The text is a good size, but for me it could be one size larger. The word recover is misspelled here) revover from her surgery.
Your message is solid as a stone. and clearly stated. I hope you shared this poem with her.
The visual fits perfectly, and she actually glows in it. I would go to the last line and hit enter once more so your poem's spacing at top and bottom is the same. Thanks for sharing this poem. It was fun reading about Lisa.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2023
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Hey Sweetie, is it any wonder I missed you? I love when someone catches my little typo as I am awaiting eye surgery and my eyes blurr so easily, but not ready to give up my writing! So thank you for catching my v instead of c and I will add one more space at the end. However those boxes are so darn small and I just can't or won't use two lines unless it's structured for that. Y'know what I mean? But thanks so much as I also appreciate all your kind words too my very dear friend!
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You are welcome. Good luck with your surgery.
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I haven't had the chance yet to make those changes, but certainly will as I know they will look much better. Thanks again Hon.
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Sweetie, take your time.
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I just did and I tried to increase the font, as you can always tell that I too like it larger, but anyway, it blew the box out into my profile part and down the page a little. That happens to me from time to time, instead of putting words on the next line. Have you ever had that happen? If not, next time you are going to post, just hit a size that you know is too big, and look to see if that happens to you. I dont' know anyone else who understands what I am saying. Lol
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No, I understand precisely because it has happened to me too. Since they added the extra font types I feel there has been more glitches in using the writing page.
Comment from Sherry SG
You write so beautifully about the people you love - and your love pours out from your heart, through your words and flows out through the screen I read your words on. I remember the piece you wrote on your DIL.
I agree with the message in your words - everyone needs to take care of themselves first and Life/ God/ Universe will eventually let us know that. Thanks for sharing - you have my 6 stars for this.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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You write so beautifully about the people you love - and your love pours out from your heart, through your words and flows out through the screen I read your words on. I remember the piece you wrote on your DIL.
I agree with the message in your words - everyone needs to take care of themselves first and Life/ God/ Universe will eventually let us know that. Thanks for sharing - you have my 6 stars for this.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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Sherry, I hope you know how sweet I think you are.. I thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind words for my poem for Lisa. And also for your very generous six stars. It's all so appreciated, my dear friend!
Comment from patcelaw
Debi, this is a beautiful story of an angel of mercy who you have come to know as a sister in Christ. I am so pleased that you have had this kind of a person in your life. May God bless you and keep you in all that you do. Patricia.
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Debi, this is a beautiful story of an angel of mercy who you have come to know as a sister in Christ. I am so pleased that you have had this kind of a person in your life. May God bless you and keep you in all that you do. Patricia.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
Comment from Teri7
Debi, This is a very lovely and heartfelt poem you have penned about your friend and sister in Christ, Lisa. She looks like a really lovely person and nurse. This made my heart smile as I read this. love and blessings, Teri
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Debi, This is a very lovely and heartfelt poem you have penned about your friend and sister in Christ, Lisa. She looks like a really lovely person and nurse. This made my heart smile as I read this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
What a great rhymed and metered tribute to a friend or 'sister in Christ' who was working most of her life and now is harvesting a bit of what was planted, as she also is in need of a little care, too. More time for family always seems to make a difference. Nice share.
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What a great rhymed and metered tribute to a friend or 'sister in Christ' who was working most of her life and now is harvesting a bit of what was planted, as she also is in need of a little care, too. More time for family always seems to make a difference. Nice share.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Very well thought out and written, though the next to last stanza ends differently. I understand why, and yet had I a pen, I would have stayed the course, with ; she recovered, cause "that's what Lisa does" ...
adding thanks somewhere recognizing it came to be through God's love.
Aye, the adjustments were great. I am glad to help if and when I can.
Chin up; go straight ahead. You are on the right track, heavenward.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Very well thought out and written, though the next to last stanza ends differently. I understand why, and yet had I a pen, I would have stayed the course, with ; she recovered, cause "that's what Lisa does" ...
adding thanks somewhere recognizing it came to be through God's love.
Aye, the adjustments were great. I am glad to help if and when I can.
Chin up; go straight ahead. You are on the right track, heavenward.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Tom, I know what you mean about that line, and after hours of looking and changing, finally it is hard to be objective, as I'm sure you know. Feedback is so awesome. Thank you so much. Story poetry to stay in meter, rhyme and still make sense to me is the hardest. So anyway I also changed the line that tells that our friend Greg passed away. He is my age so that was really hard on everyone. But the way I had the line, it almost sounded like she died too. Anyway, will you look again at what I changed those to and tell me what you think? Thanks my friend for the great review and comments and mostly for the feedback. That is Priceless!!!!
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I added a comment to the comment previous.
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Comment from Terry Broxson
Debi, this is one of your beautifully written tribute poems, in this case, to your friend Lisa. You have a natural talent for this type of poem.
I will admit, and it may be just me, that the third verse's first line gave me pause. My first reading was that Lisa and her husband passed away. After reading it a couple of times, I think it was her husband who passed away. I don't know if it was a problem for others, but I did want to call it to your attention.
Terry.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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Debi, this is one of your beautifully written tribute poems, in this case, to your friend Lisa. You have a natural talent for this type of poem.
I will admit, and it may be just me, that the third verse's first line gave me pause. My first reading was that Lisa and her husband passed away. After reading it a couple of times, I think it was her husband who passed away. I don't know if it was a problem for others, but I did want to call it to your attention.
Terry.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2023
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I see what you mean Terry, and I think I made it a little more clear. Would you mind looking and tell me? I love that you brought that to my attention, as I struggled with that and another line, that I just fixed. On the line that talks about her surgery, and keep in the flow of that repeating line, I changed that one too to say, she'll recover from her surgery, cause thats.......
Feedback is the only way we know. Because after hours of staring and working at something, you can't always be objective. I am sure you know what I mean. Some story poems are the worst, because to stay with meter, rhyme make sense, can be a challenge. So thank you so much for that, the lovely comments and for reviewing this poem.
She just had her surgery on Friday, at the Mayo Clinic in Florida, since it was so advanced she needed care. We have the Mayo here, but no care like she will get there, like a nurse daughter.
So it was a fun surprise for her and she is one of my biggest poetry fans anyway. Thanks again Terry!
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Debi, no question in mind that it is fixed. I think it reads great. And Yes! I do know what it is like to stare at a piece of work, and not see the holes. I am delighted you found it helpful. Terry.
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Comment from Sanku
A very thought provoking poem .Lisa was always helping others and may be God thought that it was time she reassessed her direction . very well written poem about a selfless person
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A very thought provoking poem .Lisa was always helping others and may be God thought that it was time she reassessed her direction . very well written poem about a selfless person
Comment Written 23-Jan-2023
