One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Cinquain and a chapter in your book entitled, "One Thousand Cranes"
Yes, speaks out on a child's love for play.
Rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed I
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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This is a Cinquain and a chapter in your book entitled, "One Thousand Cranes"
Yes, speaks out on a child's love for play.
Rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed I
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You not only caught the scene with this poem but the atmosphere. I could feel the loneliness and the loss of not catching anything. That could be a problem with one's livelihood. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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You not only caught the scene with this poem but the atmosphere. I could feel the loneliness and the loss of not catching anything. That could be a problem with one's livelihood. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your chinquapin poem- good picture presentation- empty boat full of dusk-nice- suggestions? Gentle break waves- without ' the' in there- maybe " gently as? Flows better ? Ending in - without fish - in line with full of dusk - good job AP
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I like your chinquapin poem- good picture presentation- empty boat full of dusk-nice- suggestions? Gentle break waves- without ' the' in there- maybe " gently as? Flows better ? Ending in - without fish - in line with full of dusk - good job AP
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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AP, Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
The use of the word "wake" is wonderful, amidst the dark background some days just do not favor the fishermen, an excellent Cinquain, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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The use of the word "wake" is wonderful, amidst the dark background some days just do not favor the fishermen, an excellent Cinquain, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Kym, thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like all your W-alliteration words and how the "wake" waves have that sad feel because the other meaning of "wake" as the fishermen didn't catch anything!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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I like all your W-alliteration words and how the "wake" waves have that sad feel because the other meaning of "wake" as the fishermen didn't catch anything!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
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Yes, it's sad when fisherman don't catch fish and have to go home empty handed. I guess that kind of job has its pros and cons ... as with all the others. I think the smell of fish on his body would bother me but it depends how cute he was LoL
Thank you for your kind review, Big Sister. Love you.
MariVal
Comment from tfawcus
A most evocative poem, Gypsy. You have an uncanny knack of capturing a scene and its atmosphere in just a few words. Lovely.
The fisherman's livelihood can be a precarious one.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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A most evocative poem, Gypsy. You have an uncanny knack of capturing a scene and its atmosphere in just a few words. Lovely.
The fisherman's livelihood can be a precarious one.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Tony. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and kind words. It's good to hear from you.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written cinquain to accompany this fascinating poem. The wondrous metaphors we obtain from the functions of a day to day pursuit are absolutely amazing, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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A beautifully written cinquain to accompany this fascinating poem. The wondrous metaphors we obtain from the functions of a day to day pursuit are absolutely amazing, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Roy, I appreciate your excellent five stars review. I hope you are having an awesome day.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome