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Comment from Ricky1024
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I liked this "Onomatopoeia"
Something to read and assn to acquire in our Poetry Writing collection of styles.
Thanks for sharing and as Always Yours...
Doctor Ricky1024

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
    Thank you very much I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
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This poem gives a very good image as we can feel for the homeless man inside praying/hoping that his home survives, very well presented and written****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you, Kym, I appreciate your excellent five stars review. I hope you are having an awesome day.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Your talent shines through loud and clear with this poem. Onomatopoeia works perfectly with this poem. My first graders struggled writing the sound in the poem but loved making the sound. LOL Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you, Barbara, I appreciate your kind review.

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Comment from lyenochka
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This poem is certainly an onomatopoeic poem. You have a lot of it in the second stanza and I especially liked:
"clink, clank, clunk, plink, plunk
drum to the beat of his heart"
because it made me think of the different materials that the hail was landing on.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you Big Sister. I like using onomatopoeic. ....playing with sounds...it's another way to bring poems alive...like graphic art.

    Love,

    Marival ❤️
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your kojiki poem- excellent picture presentation- interesting house / hut construction- would love to see how roof was supposed- poem brings sound into play- good job duplicating the different sounds- format seems like it would be difficult to write - good job AP

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from JT traveller
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Expertly put together. Your clever use of onomatopoeia makes this a stand out piece. Very cleverly concocted and a thoroughly enjoyable read. Thank you.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from Nicki Nance
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Your tdescription of homeless man's dilemma is moving. You truly captured his point of view in the pattern of the poem. This tender handling of a harsh topic is brilliant.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2023

reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy