One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very well written four line poem you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love, blessings and Merry Christmas! Teri
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Gypsy, This is a very well written four line poem you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love, blessings and Merry Christmas! Teri
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Happy Holidays!
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Mark Schardine
dance with the tousled white-mist hair
and in her umber eyes ... thunder
We see a moving image of a daughter showing respect as she mourns her father, and then we find this surprising word at the end, and we must ponder what it means.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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dance with the tousled white-mist hair
and in her umber eyes ... thunder
We see a moving image of a daughter showing respect as she mourns her father, and then we find this surprising word at the end, and we must ponder what it means.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Happy Holidays!
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from aryr
Sadly, what a wonderful picture of all the tombstones, Gypsy. I really loved your words because they truly pointed out what the picture was all about. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Sadly, what a wonderful picture of all the tombstones, Gypsy. I really loved your words because they truly pointed out what the picture was all about. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Happy Holidays!
Blessed be and hugs
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You used words that are powerful descriptors in this poem. This is like a poem on steroids. I'm not sure it's possible but here you did it so I'm sure it's possible. LOL Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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You used words that are powerful descriptors in this poem. This is like a poem on steroids. I'm not sure it's possible but here you did it so I'm sure it's possible. LOL Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review. Happy Holidays!
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a nice poem for Helen's father who recently passed away. He lived a long yet a good, and quiet life. He raised a great family at the same time. He should be proud of himself.
Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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What a nice poem for Helen's father who recently passed away. He lived a long yet a good, and quiet life. He raised a great family at the same time. He should be proud of himself.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time. kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I never realized that you never write rhyme poetry; or were you explaining just this type of poetry? The picture displays a strange mist of drizzle, while the earthy brown umber of wind and thunder brings darkness to the eyes.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I never realized that you never write rhyme poetry; or were you explaining just this type of poetry? The picture displays a strange mist of drizzle, while the earthy brown umber of wind and thunder brings darkness to the eyes.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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I never write rhymed poetry. With Japanese poetry I don't have to.
Thank you very much for your time. kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy Sensei
Word Weaver
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Four Line Poetry Contest Entry Rich in theme and.
It Also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your Contest Entry
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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This is a Four Line Poetry Contest Entry Rich in theme and.
It Also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your Contest Entry
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much, (*÷*) I really appreciate your helpful feedback, Also, that you took the time to read and review my poem. Happy Holidays!!! Merry Christmas!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from royowen
They may not rhyme, but the have a most poetic wave of alliteration, they are most eye catching my friend, what a marvellous scene you set with the grim greyness of the gravesite, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Drizzle(d) covered.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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They may not rhyme, but the have a most poetic wave of alliteration, they are most eye catching my friend, what a marvellous scene you set with the grim greyness of the gravesite, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Drizzle(d) covered.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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the grim greyness of the gravesite.... I love that phrase.
Thank you very much, Roy (*÷*) I really appreciate your helpful feedback, I fixed the typo. Also, that you took the time to read and review my poem. Happy Holidays!!! Merry Christmas!!!
Gypsy Sensei
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Bless you
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! What a great picture with sounds and feeling of rain with descriptive words like drizzled, tousled, and "crisp ripples of wild winter wind." Loved the thunder in her eyes. Perfect for my day of visiting the burial plot...
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Wow! What a great picture with sounds and feeling of rain with descriptive words like drizzled, tousled, and "crisp ripples of wild winter wind." Loved the thunder in her eyes. Perfect for my day of visiting the burial plot...
Comment Written 20-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Yes, I was thinking about you. (*=*)
Thank you very much for your time and kind review, Big Sister. I appreciate it. I hope your that your visit to the burial plot goes well.
Love,
Marival
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Thank you! We got hope safe. We had to Uber it and it cost $50 one way and $35 the way back. 🤨 It think it depends on the time of day...
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I take Lyft rides and it's a hit and miss. That sounds very expensive. How is your mom doing? Are there other family members with you?
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No, it's just me. But I'm helping her use her laptop more so I hope I get her interested in many new hobbies before I leave in January. 💖
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I love teaching computer skills to elderly people. I'm very pacient:) I volunteered at the Sacramento food Bank resource center for a while. I made some good friends.
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That's a satisfying job! Mom's a fast learner. The only part that's tricky is that she is too quick to click and she hits the computer screen like she's squashing bugs.
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LoL. That's so funny, I have the same problem. LoL