One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with high sensory appeal as well as beautiful imagery. I could see the whole scene in the rain, and I could hear the pitter/patter of the rain. I especially liked:
rain drizzled through the night
and outside the cool breeze billowed
as our passion's waves surged and swelled.
(Very sensual. This is what I call an ooh-la-la poem)
Beautiful artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Sorry for the late review. I am still so behind on reviews from being away. Xo. Margaret ~ LB
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with high sensory appeal as well as beautiful imagery. I could see the whole scene in the rain, and I could hear the pitter/patter of the rain. I especially liked:
rain drizzled through the night
and outside the cool breeze billowed
as our passion's waves surged and swelled.
(Very sensual. This is what I call an ooh-la-la poem)
Beautiful artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Sorry for the late review. I am still so behind on reviews from being away. Xo. Margaret ~ LB
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Margaret, it's always so good to hear from you. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and kind words. I wish you a wonderful week filled of peace and joy.
Gypsy
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G, I actually read the poem either yesterday or the day before, but decided to wait until today to review so that I could give you Six stars. However, I had a hard time finding it in my mailbox which is all backed up, so I went into your portfolio. Have a great evening. Xo. M
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Margaret thank you for waiting and going through all that trouble... you are very kind and I appreciate you.
Love,
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark Schardine
Either you found inspiration in a movie, or moviemakers need to read this poem to gain inspiration for a scene. We read it, and then close our eyes to imagine this beautiful episode in two lives.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Either you found inspiration in a movie, or moviemakers need to read this poem to gain inspiration for a scene. We read it, and then close our eyes to imagine this beautiful episode in two lives.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Mark (*÷*)
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The metaphors and descriptions are excellent with the comparison of the rain and the desire growing. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The metaphors and descriptions are excellent with the comparison of the rain and the desire growing. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Barbara,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your free verse- good picture presentation- poem Reflects the story line - feeling between the two characters- cool breeze- hot passions swelling - good job
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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I like your free verse- good picture presentation- poem Reflects the story line - feeling between the two characters- cool breeze- hot passions swelling - good job
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Ap,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! This was exquisite, Gypsy! I like how you described the passion so eloquently as "waves surged and swelled." And you built the water imagery from the "pitter-patter" of the rain and the moon and stars reflected in the puddles and the drizzling rain until the final surging waves! I felt the strong crescendo! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Wow! This was exquisite, Gypsy! I like how you described the passion so eloquently as "waves surged and swelled." And you built the water imagery from the "pitter-patter" of the rain and the moon and stars reflected in the puddles and the drizzling rain until the final surging waves! I felt the strong crescendo! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Thank you, big sister, your exceptional kind review means a lot to me. Love you ❤️
Marival
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy....although I'm a little unclear on what you meant by, "waves surged and swelled," were they at a fishing derby near an ocean somewhere? That'd be my guess!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Another fine poem, Gypsy....although I'm a little unclear on what you meant by, "waves surged and swelled," were they at a fishing derby near an ocean somewhere? That'd be my guess!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Mike,
It's a metaphor of their love making and passion.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy hugs
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I knew but was trying for humor, FAIL!
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LoL
Comment from Regina Elliott
Very enchanting and romantic. I love gentle rain
nights. Moon blessed eves
are wondrous along with
stars. Best wishes,
Gypsy Blue Rose. Blessings
and tranquility.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Very enchanting and romantic. I love gentle rain
nights. Moon blessed eves
are wondrous along with
stars. Best wishes,
Gypsy Blue Rose. Blessings
and tranquility.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Regina,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Beautifully descriptive free verse, Gypsy withwell used alliteration.
I love the Atticus quote - the poet waits to paint the unsaid.
I think you've achieved that beautifully. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Beautifully descriptive free verse, Gypsy withwell used alliteration.
I love the Atticus quote - the poet waits to paint the unsaid.
I think you've achieved that beautifully. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
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Pearl,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy hugs