One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is a wonderful modern haiku you have presented. I love the imagery and descriptive words.
Beautifully done and presented.
Best wishes and regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This is a wonderful modern haiku you have presented. I love the imagery and descriptive words.
Beautifully done and presented.
Best wishes and regards,
Mary
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes we are in that season with the colourful leaves falling and the breeze twirling them to the ground, a fine poem about Autumn and I am seeing the changes in my local park, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Yes we are in that season with the colourful leaves falling and the breeze twirling them to the ground, a fine poem about Autumn and I am seeing the changes in my local park, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Bill, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Teri7
This is another great modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. I love the quote from Mother Teresa. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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This is another great modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. I love the quote from Mother Teresa. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Bill, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written haiku. Amazing presentation background colour and font choice. Breathtaking photos to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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This is a beautifully written haiku. Amazing presentation background colour and font choice. Breathtaking photos to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Your welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Modern Haiku with us. Yes, the beautiful twirling leaves are a sight to behold. I have the need to take a trip back to the Midwest to see these gorgeous leaves. I'll need to check with my kids and see when the leaves are going to be at their peak.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this Modern Haiku with us. Yes, the beautiful twirling leaves are a sight to behold. I have the need to take a trip back to the Midwest to see these gorgeous leaves. I'll need to check with my kids and see when the leaves are going to be at their peak.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from LateBloomer
Wow! 15 syllables of vivid imagery. I especially liked:
as veil falls
(I can see all the crimson leaves falling, but also, the veil falling is symbolic of death--the death of Autumn and the mourning of Winter. I do mourn during winter--ugh. I hate it, and I hate snow--the "other" four-letter word. Just sharing - lol. Autumn is my favorite time of the year, and we're getting short-changed this year. Hurricane season is extra-early, oh joy.)
Beautiful presentation. I love that photo. Where did you get it?
Well done. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Wow! 15 syllables of vivid imagery. I especially liked:
as veil falls
(I can see all the crimson leaves falling, but also, the veil falling is symbolic of death--the death of Autumn and the mourning of Winter. I do mourn during winter--ugh. I hate it, and I hate snow--the "other" four-letter word. Just sharing - lol. Autumn is my favorite time of the year, and we're getting short-changed this year. Hurricane season is extra-early, oh joy.)
Beautiful presentation. I love that photo. Where did you get it?
Well done. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Margaret. My granddaughter lives in Florida and works for Disney. She is okay but the Ian storm was pretty scary.
I love autumn too. The leaves colors are beautiful. In southern California we don't get snow. It has been really hot.
Winter is depressing. My grandmother said old people die in winter, she died in November... years ago. It's the lack of a sunlight that makes most people depressed.
Thank you very much for the review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rena Smith
I love this poem because the words blend together perfectly and it makes me think about romance and love on a beautiful day. I love the choice of words the writer chose together such as: flirty, autumn breeze, scarlet leaves, and veil falls. I love how the writer paints a vivid picture that exudes into a beautiful painting, great job.
beautiful
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I love this poem because the words blend together perfectly and it makes me think about romance and love on a beautiful day. I love the choice of words the writer chose together such as: flirty, autumn breeze, scarlet leaves, and veil falls. I love how the writer paints a vivid picture that exudes into a beautiful painting, great job.
beautiful
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Rena. I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars. You are very kind. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from royowen
As always you are a great writer of haiku + and it's always a pleasure to read your pen creations dear friend. It's autumn there, rushing toward the cooler weather, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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As always you are a great writer of haiku + and it's always a pleasure to read your pen creations dear friend. It's autumn there, rushing toward the cooler weather, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Love your beautiful description autumn breeze that is showing off with those bright red leaves! I guess the "veils falling" are the trees undressing? Great haiku. (You might want to change the description to 5/7/3)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Love your beautiful description autumn breeze that is showing off with those bright red leaves! I guess the "veils falling" are the trees undressing? Great haiku. (You might want to change the description to 5/7/3)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I was going to have the salome's dance of seven veils for Herod in modern stage, as you know, based on Matthew 14 ... story of the Feast of Herod and the execution of John the Baptist. but I thought many people would not get the reference.
Thank you, big sister! Love you.
Marival ❤️
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That would be very artistic. The Matthew chapter only talks about Salome's dance but not of the seven veils. I guess some creative storyteller added that for effect. 😊
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Yes, the "dance of seven veils" originated with Wilde's 1891 play Salome.
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Ah. Good to know! I also have seen many great paintings of the way artists viewed that scene!
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your haiku poem- 5/7/3? good picture presentation- excellent flow- breeze twirling around leaves- excellent visual- as veil falls at the end of autumn- nice -good job
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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I like your haiku poem- 5/7/3? good picture presentation- excellent flow- breeze twirling around leaves- excellent visual- as veil falls at the end of autumn- nice -good job
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, AP, I missed that syllables count. I had 5-7-5 but I changed my mind and forgot to change the subtitle. Have a great weekend!
Gypsy hugs
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I do this a lot - good poem!