Comment from karenina

Excellent

So emotionally wrenching! This is the magic of your words, Gypsy. I dare any poet to elicit anything more poignant with five times the length!

Sometimes I'm blown away...

I can't fathom a mom's pain!

Karenina

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022

Karenina, I appreciate all the time you take on my old poems, you are very kind. Love you ❤️

reply by karenina on 23-Sep-2022

They are not old! All this month! You're so prolific!

reply by the author on 23-Sep-2022

I have a personal goal of two poems a day will keep the doctor away lol

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Gypsy Queen,
so very sad, yet so very cleverly composed.

Your word play lingers in mid-air as this sad refrain dances around my mind. Beautiful work!

With our thoughts we create...
Heaven.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022

Muchisimas gracias! Tu eres el mejor <3 besitos y abrazos (*v*)

Reina Gitana
"Just as the dawn is the forerunner of the arising of the sun, so true friendship is the forerunner of the arising of the path." - Buddha

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

WOW! Gypsy, your poem speaks volumes. Highly emotional ~ dramatic.
In 16 syllables, you have created a complete image. Of note:

last baby breath
(Get the tissues)

Soulful. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022

Margaret, it's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your warm and kind review. Take care my friend.

Gypsy
Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason.- Novalis

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written Modern Senyru. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022

Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your poem- good picture presentation- modern Senryu- good flow and connection between lines - meaning - emptying the graveside vase- replacing the flowers- still brings up strong feelings- good job

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022

Ap

Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is a very creative and interesting poem. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022

Thank you very much, Raul. I appreciate your exceptional review.
I am always grateful of encourament and kindness.

Gypsy hugs
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." --Kurt Vonnegut

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Again you tell a moving story about a mother who is mourning a lost baby. We don't know who she is mourning until the last line which has the double entendre of the baby breath flower and the baby's last breath.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022

Thank you very much, Helen. I don't know anybody that lost a baby, this is fiction, thank God.

Gypsy hugs
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." --Kurt Vonnegut

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This Modern Senryu is very sad. I could feel the emotion as I read. You chose the perfect words to evoke this emotion. I do understand a mother's heartache burying an infant.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022

Thank you very much, Barbara I appreciate your exceptional review.
I am always grateful of encourament and kindness.

Gypsy hugs
"Happiness is an uphill battle. Wear the good shoes." --Kurt Vonnegut