Novella - Unwanted Dog
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Comment from Nicki Nance
This was so well written that I felt like an accomplice to the writer. I liked your tiny embedded stories about the other customer. I will be looking for more of this novella.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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This was so well written that I felt like an accomplice to the writer. I liked your tiny embedded stories about the other customer. I will be looking for more of this novella.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The narrator's character is emerging as easier to envisage and empathise with. I like the extra information you add, like the person behind the name of the street but I feel you need to integrate it more into the text. You do this further down when the narrator remembers something from school.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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The narrator's character is emerging as easier to envisage and empathise with. I like the extra information you add, like the person behind the name of the street but I feel you need to integrate it more into the text. You do this further down when the narrator remembers something from school.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a well written and deep history of music.
I have quite an extensive collection of records so I know the Mercury record is very old indeed.
A lot of records back then were 78 and very thick.
I've even seen 96s that were aluminum and then vinyl coated.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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This is a well written and deep history of music.
I have quite an extensive collection of records so I know the Mercury record is very old indeed.
A lot of records back then were 78 and very thick.
I've even seen 96s that were aluminum and then vinyl coated.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 30-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2022
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Appreciate the comments and the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I guess to live on the streets means no food, clothing or monies. I find myself feeling a little sad to think that you drank a can of pop without paying for it. Evidently you had no monies in your pocket when you left.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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I guess to live on the streets means no food, clothing or monies. I find myself feeling a little sad to think that you drank a can of pop without paying for it. Evidently you had no monies in your pocket when you left.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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None. Had to survive somehow, though do agree taking something that does not belong to you from a store without paying for it not good. Appreciate the review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Brett,
thanks for sharing this interesting bit of history about yourself. It's a tough spot to be in to have to resort to shoplifting just to survive. I think my nerves would be on edge all the time. Well done. I look forward to your next chapter.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hello Brett,
thanks for sharing this interesting bit of history about yourself. It's a tough spot to be in to have to resort to shoplifting just to survive. I think my nerves would be on edge all the time. Well done. I look forward to your next chapter.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from Wendy G
Fine chapter. You caught and kept my interest from the start. I did wonder why the can needed to be flushed down the toilet but I guess it was simply an act of defiance and a protest about how life had treated you. Looking forward to your next chapter. Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Fine chapter. You caught and kept my interest from the start. I did wonder why the can needed to be flushed down the toilet but I guess it was simply an act of defiance and a protest about how life had treated you. Looking forward to your next chapter. Wendy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Ulla
Brett, here goes my last six, and it's so well deserved. You make me walk in your shoes. I can so identify what you're saying and doing.
Yes, I've spent my first few years in an orphanage, but I never had to do what you did. Run away. But I can never the less identify with it all. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Brett, here goes my last six, and it's so well deserved. You make me walk in your shoes. I can so identify what you're saying and doing.
Yes, I've spent my first few years in an orphanage, but I never had to do what you did. Run away. But I can never the less identify with it all. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Appreciate the sixer and the review. Some shoes, as you know, are difficult at best to walk in. Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from Sankey
This is still good reading. Mainly because it is obviously all true. Keep it coming, old mate. just one tiny spag this time. "And, there she goes. Hurricane M(y)r[y]tle!"
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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This is still good reading. Mainly because it is obviously all true. Keep it coming, old mate. just one tiny spag this time. "And, there she goes. Hurricane M(y)r[y]tle!"
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Appreciate the sixer and the review. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. More to come.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another excellent chapter, Brett. You're use of good imagery and varied actions have painted a fascinating picture and taken us along with you. I kinda like you cheekiness. lol Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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This is another excellent chapter, Brett. You're use of good imagery and varied actions have painted a fascinating picture and taken us along with you. I kinda like you cheekiness. lol Well done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Appreciate the sixer and the review.
Comment from royowen
It would be mildly alarming to know that you would be a victim or a warrior in the jungle streets, but I'm sure you learned to survive, how do,I know? You're here now. Things would be difficult, but beset by the feeling, that anything was better than the boy's home. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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It would be mildly alarming to know that you would be a victim or a warrior in the jungle streets, but I'm sure you learned to survive, how do,I know? You're here now. Things would be difficult, but beset by the feeling, that anything was better than the boy's home. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Agreed. Even the streets were better to me than Hermitage Hall could ever be. Appreciate your insights and the review.
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Most welcome