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Comment from Mark Schardine
We think of a quiet light with a bright moon, and with blossoms all about to reflect its light. It calms our spirits, and opens our minds to new thoughts.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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We think of a quiet light with a bright moon, and with blossoms all about to reflect its light. It calms our spirits, and opens our minds to new thoughts.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Mark :)
gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem- it flows nicely - the presentation is different and interesting- gives a simple picture of the moon in the arms of the trees - good job
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I like your poem- it flows nicely - the presentation is different and interesting- gives a simple picture of the moon in the arms of the trees - good job
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, AP. Blessings.
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Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very lovely 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Gypsy, This is a very lovely 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Terri. I appreciate your time and kind review. Blessings.
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Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
The artwork for this post was outstanding. It is paired nicely with your poem. Your verse really feels like a Haiku, especially the first two lines. The juxtaposition was not obvious in your last line since the poem read, for me like a full sentence.
Mark
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Gypsy,
The artwork for this post was outstanding. It is paired nicely with your poem. Your verse really feels like a Haiku, especially the first two lines. The juxtaposition was not obvious in your last line since the poem read, for me like a full sentence.
Mark
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Yeah, this is a 5/7/5 for the contest and goes by different rules than haiku. For 5/7/5 poems It's okay to read like a sentence.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Flower Moon Nestles"
This is a 5/7/5 Poem Contest entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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"Flower Moon Nestles"
This is a 5/7/5 Poem Contest entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Ricky. I appreciate your time and review.
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Comment from mermaids
I like the image of the moon nestling, it is a comforting line. This is a unique poem about the moon. I think of the moon comforting me but in your words the moon is comforted. Excellent haiku form and use of words.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I like the image of the moon nestling, it is a comforting line. This is a unique poem about the moon. I think of the moon comforting me but in your words the moon is comforted. Excellent haiku form and use of words.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your time and review.
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Comment from lyenochka
Love all the poetic personification in your 5-7-5! The idea that the moon is "nestling" gives me a cozy feeling and that the trees are like sentinels sends a sense of security. Is the Flower Moon next month? or April?
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Love all the poetic personification in your 5-7-5! The idea that the moon is "nestling" gives me a cozy feeling and that the trees are like sentinels sends a sense of security. Is the Flower Moon next month? or April?
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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It's a may moon in the native American moon almanac. I'll add that to the author notes.
Thank you very much, Helen. I always appreciate your exceptional reviews. Blessings.
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