One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Boogienights
Memories like you had can help us through troubling times. I have so many memories of my mom, which makes me miss her less. This is a happy yet sad poem...thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Memories like you had can help us through troubling times. I have so many memories of my mom, which makes me miss her less. This is a happy yet sad poem...thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your feedback.
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Comment from Sugarray77
You've written and very poignant and meaningful 12/5 Modern Haiku. This form lends itself to so many emotional and resonating thoughts and themes. Well done, Gypsy, on this stellar write.
Melissa
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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You've written and very poignant and meaningful 12/5 Modern Haiku. This form lends itself to so many emotional and resonating thoughts and themes. Well done, Gypsy, on this stellar write.
Melissa
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Melissa, thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from June Sargent
This is a very poignant piece that reflects the bond between father and child that never weakens. The sad thing is that time can rob us of some of the joy, but cannot erase the memories.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This is a very poignant piece that reflects the bond between father and child that never weakens. The sad thing is that time can rob us of some of the joy, but cannot erase the memories.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--ah yes, memories; they can bring you joy or painful sadness--and memories of a loved one are double the effect, that's for sure
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--ah yes, memories; they can bring you joy or painful sadness--and memories of a loved one are double the effect, that's for sure
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Mark Schardine
as sun shimmers over warm lake, I reminisce --
skipping stones with dad
now, I watch him struggle to breathe in ICU --
my heart skips a beat
At one time he was the strongest and most admirable man in the world, and now we can only pray for him.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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as sun shimmers over warm lake, I reminisce --
skipping stones with dad
now, I watch him struggle to breathe in ICU --
my heart skips a beat
At one time he was the strongest and most admirable man in the world, and now we can only pray for him.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from dragonpoet
Gypsy,
This is a good form for the topic. I like the picture. I am sorry to hear your father is struggling. Is it COVID? I hope he has a full recovery.
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Gypsy,
This is a good form for the topic. I like the picture. I am sorry to hear your father is struggling. Is it COVID? I hope he has a full recovery.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Hello, Joan, you are the only one who got the covid part. It's fictional. Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
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I just thought because trouble breathing is one of the main symptoms of COVID.
Your welcome.
Joan
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like this poem. I remember my father teaching me to skip stones. Thankfully, the passed peacefully in his sleep one Christmas Day. He always said that he was afraid he would live through the long, hard winter and die in the spring and he hated that idea. He got his wish. You poem is touching. There is a poignant balance between struggling to learn to skip stones (it's an art, I think) and your father struggling to breath. I wish you both comfort and blessings.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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I like this poem. I remember my father teaching me to skip stones. Thankfully, the passed peacefully in his sleep one Christmas Day. He always said that he was afraid he would live through the long, hard winter and die in the spring and he hated that idea. He got his wish. You poem is touching. There is a poignant balance between struggling to learn to skip stones (it's an art, I think) and your father struggling to breath. I wish you both comfort and blessings.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from Ricky1024
"Skipping Stones with Dad"
This is a 12/5 po we m rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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"Skipping Stones with Dad"
This is a 12/5 po we m rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from Anne Johnston
What a delightful picture to illustrate your thoughtful poem. Memories of childhood, spending time with a parent contrasted to time spent with them when they are suffering. Very well done
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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What a delightful picture to illustrate your thoughtful poem. Memories of childhood, spending time with a parent contrasted to time spent with them when they are suffering. Very well done
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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You are welcome
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
This one really resonates in me. I have faced a similar situation in life. This is a brilliant piece. You are awesome. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This one really resonates in me. I have faced a similar situation in life. This is a brilliant piece. You are awesome. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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I have posted one more 12/5 poem. Please have a look. Thank you.
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I reviewed it. It's excellent.
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I reviewed it... it's very good!