One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I like the word 'drenches" as it is a pleasing mnd picture. Again you have a great presentation with this stunning picture. Also the way the light beams melt into the black is lovely. Smiles. Giddy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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I like the word 'drenches" as it is a pleasing mnd picture. Again you have a great presentation with this stunning picture. Also the way the light beams melt into the black is lovely. Smiles. Giddy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gert sherwood
Gypsy Blue you 5-7-5 showing us with your words, a amazing sunset I wish you the best of luck for the prompt
contest. I love what you said about the beauty the
golden blades of wheat
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Gypsy Blue you 5-7-5 showing us with your words, a amazing sunset I wish you the best of luck for the prompt
contest. I love what you said about the beauty the
golden blades of wheat
Gert
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from mermaids
After reading your poem, I can see and feel the last light of day. Your descriptive words create a clear scene of the end of day. "Obscured miracle" is a perfect last line.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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After reading your poem, I can see and feel the last light of day. Your descriptive words create a clear scene of the end of day. "Obscured miracle" is a perfect last line.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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I am happy you got the last night. I thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
That's so true, when there is a different intensity in the light, then how is one going to tell a truly ripened wheat, one can be deceived into believing different things, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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That's so true, when there is a different intensity in the light, then how is one going to tell a truly ripened wheat, one can be deceived into believing different things, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Roy, Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy
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Pleasure
Comment from lyenochka
I like that the light "drenches." It mixes the visual of the last lingering light with the tangible sensation of wetness with the verb "drenches." Perhaps this is an example of synesthesia.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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I like that the light "drenches." It mixes the visual of the last lingering light with the tangible sensation of wetness with the verb "drenches." Perhaps this is an example of synesthesia.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Helen, Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Oooo, I like this one.
Your first 2 lines are stunningly perfect and flow fantastically.
The satori is beautiful. I'm not sure why you used obscured and miracle but that could just be me.
Your verb choice- "drenches" is also stunning and really helps paint your picture.
Good luck we with awesome entry!
Katiemae
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Oooo, I like this one.
Your first 2 lines are stunningly perfect and flow fantastically.
The satori is beautiful. I'm not sure why you used obscured and miracle but that could just be me.
Your verb choice- "drenches" is also stunning and really helps paint your picture.
Good luck we with awesome entry!
Katiemae
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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the last light of day
drenches golden blades of wheat ?
obscured miracle
The last line (satori) means two things... obscure as nobody see is at this moment and obscure as in dark night. Beautiful nature scenes go unnoticed sometimes but that doesn't mean they are less beautiful :)
Thank you very much for the kind words, helpful feedback, and review.
gypsy
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Thank you. I get it now. I am a bit slow sometimes. I really love this one
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no worries, I can see how it can be hard to get
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Very nice 5-7-5 poem. Your use of color and shadow in the artwork that you selected compliments your verse. The two elements pair perfectly well together. Well crafted. Good job!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Very nice 5-7-5 poem. Your use of color and shadow in the artwork that you selected compliments your verse. The two elements pair perfectly well together. Well crafted. Good job!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Brenda, Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy
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You're Welcome!