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NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge

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Comment from JudyE
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What a gorgeous photo - and you're all in step! lol I think it's good that we don't know about many of the 'lasts'. It would be way too painful sometimes to know.

 Comment Written 02-May-2021


reply by the author on 03-May-2021
    You're right there, Judy :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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30. Lasts
by Debra White

Hello Debra

Excellent Short Rhymed Poem to end your book NaPoWriMo 202. Congratulations!

I like how you ended your book with a poem about the end of your children's childhood.

 Comment Written 02-May-2021


reply by the author on 03-May-2021
    Hi Gypsy :)
    Thank you for your lovely feedback :)
    Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from pome lover
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What a great poem and picture, - happy, happy faces! ( except I can't see your son's.) Beautiful family, too.
Your poem was a perfect ending for the contest. Just lovely!
I have really enjoyed corresponding with you. Thanks for all your kindnesses!
I have to wait until tomorrow to post my last one.
Hope you're over the after effects of the vaccine.
Katharine

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Hi Katharine :) Thank you for your lovely feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! I don't have many photographs of us all together, this was the most recent - shame Ben had his face covered!
    I'm feeling much better today, thank you! x
Comment from Ginnygray
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Extraordinary description and poignant poem giving us stages of growth and memories of our dear "little ones" who have now obtained early adulthood, but with Mom, her babies, they will always remain! Unconditional love of a Mom is a PRICELESS joy that I can appreciate everyday since I lost my dearest love, my Mother! My forever advocate and friend unconditionally was "My Mother"! I was fortunate in my life to know this love and I was her only child!
Another great writing!!

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Hello Ginny, Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating :) I appreciate both! Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Michele Harber
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What a charming poem. Of course it's hard to watch one's children not only grow but outgrow certain things that had been regular parts of life, but the important thing is that you recognize that this growth is necessary and to be expected, and it sounds as though you give your children the room they need to grow.

Your rhymes are well chosen and very much fit your poem's simple and nostalgic style.

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Hello Michele :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
reply by Michele Harber on 02-May-2021
    You're very welcome, Debra. It's always nice to hear about a close, happy, functional family.
Comment from robyn corum
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Debra,

The image is beautiful - and familiar. Did you post other pix from this same walk at a different time, maybe?

The poem is beautiful - in that mommy-heartbreaking way. The part about time not asking permission killlllllled me. This was just awesome. Congrats on completing the challenge!

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Hello Robyn, Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating :) I appreciate both! Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A finely rhymed poem Debra and we see our life slipping away when we watch our children grow and there is no stopping time and this is why our memories are so precious, a perfect flow here and your rhymes bring this poem to life, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 02-May-2021
    Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback :) Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Congrats on completing the series. Quite a challenge--glad I didn't take it! This is such a sweet poem--lovely sentiments, beautifully conveyed. Heartwarming.

 Comment Written 01-May-2021


reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Thank you, Liz, for your feedback and for sticking with me whilst I got through the challenge. Pressure's over now - glad I'm done!
    Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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This is a beautiful way to wrap up your journey throughout April, Debra. You picture is awesome and perfect for your great poem. Your words flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery with an emotional tug at the heart. You expressed your thoughts and feelings well about your children growing up year after year.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Thank you so much, Jan, for your lovely feedback. I truly appreciate it.
    Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from harmony13
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Amazing how when we look back - where did the years go. The author's
words are engaging, interesting, clear and creative. I really liked the last
stanza especially the last line. Thank you for the author's notes -
great picture! Hope you and your family are well and safe....Maria

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 01-May-2021
    Hi Maria :)
    Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
    We are all well, thank you! Hope you are too x
    Best wishes, Debra.