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NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge

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Comment from Jesse James Doty
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I love this true story in poetic form! So well done and written, with the ending built right into this wonderful result of twenty years of marriage. I wish you happy trails! May you and your knight in shining armor have a wonderful life together! Assumptions have been made, yet, all I know is that people still find each other, plenty of times, and mate for life! Thank you for telling your story, I hope you didn't mind, a little of mine, in all its glory.
Well written and excellently done.
Have a pleasant evening,
Jesse


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Thank you so much for your lovely feedback, Jesse :) I appreciate it! Best wishes, Debra
reply by Jesse James Doty on 30-Apr-2021
    You're welcome, Debra.
    Have a great day!
    Jesse
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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History
by Debra White


Hello, Debra,

You are very lucky to find Mr Right. I like your rhyming poem... it's very well written.

Your poem flows well. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions. it presents strong images.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Hi Gypsy :) Thank you for your lovely comments, much appreciated! Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Sally Law
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I'm glad you are married to someone who loves and appreciates you, dear Debra. You much prettier than the stupid tube with the football game running. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs..

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Aw, thanks, Sal :) Best wishes to you as always, Debra x
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Debra.
-Congratulations on almost
20 years of marriage.
-You told a very good story
in the form of an old fashioned
fairy tale.
-Effective imagery and rhyme,
as well as the not so good
and the positive ending that
came out of it.
-Well done!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Hello Pam :)
    Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful feedback. I appreciate it as always, best wishes, Debra
reply by Pam (respa) on 30-Apr-2021
    You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Wendy G
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Well written story in a poem. I'm glad that Mr White was Mr Right. You have condensed a big part of your life into a very short history lesson. Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Thank you so much, Wendy :) Much appreciated! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
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Excellent poetic form to tell an abridged poem of the happily ever after in Once Upon a Time.

Terrific rhyme and metre and the kind of write that says everything that needs to be said succinctly.

Only two days left now. You did a wonderful job of the NaPo. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Thank you so much, Gloria, for your lovely feedback and continued support and encouragement over the past month. I appreciate you :)
    Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Charming love story--whimsically told--you nailed the typical reasons why a marriage fails--good riddance to the dick. clever--name came with a ball and chain!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    LOL! Thanks, Liz :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a short sweet write Debra and I am so glad to hear you are happily married to Mr White! You made good use of rhyme here and your poem flowed like a dream, much enjoyed, love Dolly z

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
    Hello Dolly :) Thank you for your kind feedback, I appreciate it very much! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Sherry Asbury
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A story that me for the tissue box - oh bother - I use tp for snuffling... This is a great story and shows how sometimes we just don't know what is out there for us. Debra White, sweet and bright, she once was wrong but is oh so right!!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
    Ah, Sherry :) Thank you so much for your sweet feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Your image pairs perfectly with your personal account of finding your true and lasting love, Debra. I enjoyed reading your poem. Your rhymes are great as is the smooth flow. Your words create great imagery. I could see this as I read.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
    Thank you so much, Jan, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it as always. Best wishes, Debra :)