Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Newness
by Debra White

Lovely Cinquain, it's an interesting poetic form. It looks like you followed the rules well. I like the presentation too. It flows nicely.

Cheers,

gypsy

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Good word choices! I read the requirements you list--I think you nailed it. Excellent notes--I always appreciate your precise definitions, even for non-obscure words.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thanks Liz :) I like to include definitions for words that I think may be taken either the wrong way, or too lightly! Maybe I shouldn't, maybe I should leave everything to reader interpretation.... but, l know lots of people don't bother to read the author notes anyway LOL
Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Great that you have researched the requirements of the cinquain form. It's more detailed than syllables only. I very much like what you have done is expanding the meaning of innovative newness.

Great job with this, Debra and an excellent addition to your NaPo project. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Gloria :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You brought to us the meaning of this word in no uncertain terms and we have a full understanding here of the word newness, a fine Cinquain Debra, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thank you for your feedback, Dolly :) Best wishes, Debra x

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thank you for doing more research on the cinquain poetic form. I like how you presented it - that makes it more thought-provoking. The cinquain contests here only focus on the syllabic count but I like your definition. The picture is perfect and the poem takes us from the something new to something that is new and useful, like the lightbulb!

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, Helen :) Thank you for your kind and encouraging feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

You do these forms so well. I really like this one and you make it light and pleasant. I love your writing - and you!! You are so sweet. I always look forward to reading your work.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Aw, that's so nice of you, Sherry :) Thank you for your kind support. Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

This Cinquain poem offers a succinct and well articulated defining of the concept of innovation. The image accompanying the piece is perfectly suited to the poem.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thank you for your feedback, Sharon. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

You certainly put your all i to each and every one of these. Your study and finesse shines here. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge. You're nearing the end!!
Sal XOs....

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Sal, for your kind and encouraging feedback. I do appreciate you x
Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

You've written, the good starting point, and then expanded on it, the good framework for a story, now all you need are the characters, great poem Debra, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021

Thank you, Roy :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by royowen on 26-Apr-2021

A pleasure

Comment from Miranda Langston

Excellent

this is a really creative cinquain you wrote. i guess i would describe it as... fresh. nouveau ;) hehe :D i also really like the picture you chose to go with this one

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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021

Thank you, Miranda, for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra