NaPoWriMo 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "16. Death"NaPoWriMo 2021 Poetry Challenge
10 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
well, I think it's a great Acrostic Cinquain, and I don't know how you could have, for death, two colorful adjectives. (delightful oblivion?)
And I love the hopeful destination at he end. Brought a grin.
Good job.
Katharine
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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well, I think it's a great Acrostic Cinquain, and I don't know how you could have, for death, two colorful adjectives. (delightful oblivion?)
And I love the hopeful destination at he end. Brought a grin.
Good job.
Katharine
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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Hi Katharine :)
Thank you for your great feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both! - Delightful oblivion is right! (although that line needed to start with an E!)
Thanks again :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Intriguing conjectures dramatically formatted. I see your note re line two--even if its not per form, it is a clever word pair!
Destination Heaven? If there is one, for you, for sure--I'm headed south.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Intriguing conjectures dramatically formatted. I see your note re line two--even if its not per form, it is a clever word pair!
Destination Heaven? If there is one, for you, for sure--I'm headed south.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Who knows...?!
Thanks, Liz, for your kind feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A process we have come to terms with as an inevitable ending for all of us and our only solace is that we will go to heaven, a fine write Debra, albeit sad, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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A process we have come to terms with as an inevitable ending for all of us and our only solace is that we will go to heaven, a fine write Debra, albeit sad, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Sharon Davis
This acrostic cinquain is extremely effective in its message and perspective. Your presentation is enhanced by the choice of background color, colored font at the beginning of each line, and image chosen to illustrate the poem's theme. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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This acrostic cinquain is extremely effective in its message and perspective. Your presentation is enhanced by the choice of background color, colored font at the beginning of each line, and image chosen to illustrate the poem's theme. Nicely done.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Sharon, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that's a more complex cinquain form than I have ever seen here. I have only understood it to be syllabic: 2-4-6-8-2.
Per your instructions, you carried it out perfectly PLUS you made it acrostic as well. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Well, that's a more complex cinquain form than I have ever seen here. I have only understood it to be syllabic: 2-4-6-8-2.
Per your instructions, you carried it out perfectly PLUS you made it acrostic as well. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Helen :)
I appreciate your encouragement and support.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Death
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Excellent Acrostic Cinquain entry for the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge.
Sometimes I think about death and what comes after but I try to push the thought away. I'm grateful for every day I live.
I like the Acrostic Cinquain form you chose. By your notes, it seems you did it right.
Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Death
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
Excellent Acrostic Cinquain entry for the NaPoWriMo 2021 challenge.
Sometimes I think about death and what comes after but I try to push the thought away. I'm grateful for every day I live.
I like the Acrostic Cinquain form you chose. By your notes, it seems you did it right.
Well done!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Gypsy :) I try not to think about it too much either... sometimes it plays on my mind though.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Death, has a lot going on in it which far exceeds any cinquain requirements. I think I've seen this format before but can't think of the name. For what you have portrayed here, the theme is well covered with your chosen words. I don't see Existence's end as two colorful adjectives, but otherwise you present a nice poem.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This poem, Death, has a lot going on in it which far exceeds any cinquain requirements. I think I've seen this format before but can't think of the name. For what you have portrayed here, the theme is well covered with your chosen words. I don't see Existence's end as two colorful adjectives, but otherwise you present a nice poem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Hi Bill :) Thank you so much for your feedback. I appreciate it. You're so right... I screwed up with that line LOL, they aren't even solid adjectives - what was I thinking?! I should remove the author notes!
Again, I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from royowen
As a Christian, one believes that death is merely a transition, in fact is trading one "life" for an eternal one, through Christ's death and resurrection of course. So I wouldn't put a question Mark, at "Heaven", that suggests.doubt. But beautifully written Debra, great job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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As a Christian, one believes that death is merely a transition, in fact is trading one "life" for an eternal one, through Christ's death and resurrection of course. So I wouldn't put a question Mark, at "Heaven", that suggests.doubt. But beautifully written Debra, great job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Hello Roy, thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it :) Best wishes, Debra
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A pleasure
Comment from juliaSjames
This is the first time I've seen an acrostic cinquain. It must have been quite a challenge but you made it work. I like the upbeat conclusion. Who wouldn't? :-))
Thanks for sharing, Debra. Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is the first time I've seen an acrostic cinquain. It must have been quite a challenge but you made it work. I like the upbeat conclusion. Who wouldn't? :-))
Thanks for sharing, Debra. Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Julia, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Love this - I don't believe in endings, so this is my kind of poetry. You have done it very well and with an artistic flair that makes it stand out!!
I think we are kindred spirits to some extent and I will watch for your work!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Love this - I don't believe in endings, so this is my kind of poetry. You have done it very well and with an artistic flair that makes it stand out!!
I think we are kindred spirits to some extent and I will watch for your work!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Sherry :) I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Best wishes, Debra