Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Debra,

That is pretty cool. Wouldn't it be awesome if we could wake up looking MARVELOUS after each night's sleep? Wow. What an energizing thought! Oh, but when I look in a mirror reality comes crashing back. No good changes here. --sigh--

But the poem is cool!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

The old beauty sleep trick doesn't work for me either, Robyn...shame!
Thanks for the feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

A neat definition, verbally and visually.
A succinct description of a caterpillar's complete make-over, which is truly remarkable, and you pegged it.
A good entry. Simple and lovely.
Katharine

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Katharine :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

So beautifully written and illustrated in black and white. Love this one as I'm off to sleep. A fine one and ending for my reviewing day. Sending along my very best, dear Debra.
Sal XOs...

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Sal, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

The line I really like in this is waking from the beauty sleep. Metamorphosis truly is a massive change, and most definitely for the good IMO.

A fine entry into your NaPo project, Debra. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021

Hi Gloria :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Charming whimsy--beauty sleep--wish that would work for me. Startling choice of transfiguration vs the common metamorphosis takes this to a higher level.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021

Thanks so much, Liz :) Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Metamorphosis
by Debra White

Excellent 5/7/5 poem for the NaPoWriMo challenge. Good syllables count and connection between lines. A perfect sample of 5/7/5. Naps always make me feel refreshed :)

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

Debra, your second line really makes this poem. The thought of beauty sleep leading to a gorgeous butterfly is so appropriate. The art works perfectly to show the dry cocoon and the new life.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

Thank you, Susan, for your lovely feedback. Thanks for sharing which parts you liked best :)
Kind regards, Debra

reply by Susan Newell on 13-Apr-2021

Uou are welcome.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh, THAT kind of metamorphosis. I was thinking of Kafka at first. Whew! Thank you for this lovely nature 5-7-5 about the metamorphosis from caterpillar to butterfly. If only a "beauty sleep" could help us that way! Lol.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

If only, indeed!
Thanks for your feedback, Helen. I appreciate your kind and encouraging reviews. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

This succinct 5/7/5 piece, is simple in its expression, and powerful in its presentation. Well chosen title and artwork echo the text of the poem., highlighting its theme. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

Thank you, Sharon, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it. Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes I think one of the most frequently used metaphors is the butterfly emerging from its chrysalis, a thing of great Beauty, like the ugly duckling, beautifully written and observed Debra. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021

Thank you, Roy :) Best wishes, Debra

reply by royowen on 13-Apr-2021

Bless you