Comment from Mintybee

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem. The last line is perfect, "Let's swim in the stars." The poem starts with a beach, but moves to a metaphorical ocean in the sky, and ends with a beautiful dream - to explore that ocean together.
Mintybee

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Mintybee, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Love the thought and combination with photo-art. I keep at you with each nighttime prayer, and hope your troubles will ease. Unfortunately, aging has a way of stealing precious gems we had... Once Upon a Time.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025

Hi Tom, thanks for alll the kind words, except for the aging one. Haha. My lupus robbed my body and named me the bionic woman already back in my twenties, so this with my eye is about the lupus too. I scratched the eye with numerous infections. So I don't feel aging has anything to do with it, but I have been given many surgeries for my lupus back as a young adult. Thanks a lot for all the kind words that you did say. Love, Debi

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Romance on the beach. You set a perfect romantic mood with this contest entry. Thank you for sharing it with us. I enjoyed reading. I feel a trip to Gulf coming my way.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Barb, many liked that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from rjuselius

Exceptional

This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear Debi! I love the imagery, it has a deeper meaning.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings with hugs and kisses!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hello, sweet Rebekka, it has been so long!! It is so good to see you.
So many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. Thanks so very much for the generous six stars, sweetheart. I thank you again, my dear friend. Much Love, Debi

Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell

Excellent

This is a lovely poem, and the pretty picture enhances your words perfectly. I love how you used the reflection of the stars poetically as a place to swim! Hugs! Verna

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi my dear Verna, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear sister. Much Love and hugs to you, Verna! Debi

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is very nicely written for the club event and I wish you the Writing. I also wish you a very wonderful day and a very good week. I hope your eyes are doing something better. Patricia.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Patricia, thanks for your good wishes. Many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I am glad you have tried this form Debi and I enjoyed the sentiment here as your magical presentation is pleasing and ambient. As there is no need for rhyme for this unique and special format, perhaps you would consider this suggestion for the last line: (let's swim in our love). As these means you don't have to repeat the word (stars).
It's just a suggestion, and I might try this form myself as it is quite wonderful, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025

That is so funny that you said that, Dolly. As I was trying to think of alternative way to describe the stars too without saying it twice. I appreciate your suggestion so much and actually was just going to try another thought I had. It's not that I don't love yours but it is suppose to be a comical twist at the end. If you wouldn't mind taking another look, I always love your take.
Thank you so much. Love, Debi

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 04-Feb-2025

No problem Debi, I think your poem is very refreshing and I am glad you are trying something new, love Dolly x

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

I love the image of swimming in the stars. There is a light feel and flow to your words that makes the reader feel good. I also like how the stars are reflected in the ocean. Your words paint a live picture.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Elaine, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This isn't a form I'm familiar with, but I like the sentiments expressed. It is very romantic. I see you have followed the rules and made it a poem that is nice to read.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Beth, many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Oh, I want to be there even if I have to do it in my dreams with my honey. Can't imagine a more romantic spot. Your poem swept me away into memory land. Thank you! Hope you are doing okay today. Always in my prayers.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Thank you, my sweet Carol. Many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi