Fare-Thee-Well
I just know she's bad for me...52 total reviews
Comment from Judy Couch
This poem carries a lot of emotion. I'm not sure about the picture. Is the poem about an encounter with a vampire? I wasn't sure. It has good rhyme and is written well.
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This poem carries a lot of emotion. I'm not sure about the picture. Is the poem about an encounter with a vampire? I wasn't sure. It has good rhyme and is written well.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
Comment from visionary1234
Well of COURSE it's you dear ... who else would write such wonderfully creepy stuff! I'm assuming "Fair" is a play on words, rather than the usual Fare Thee Well?"
:)S
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Well of COURSE it's you dear ... who else would write such wonderfully creepy stuff! I'm assuming "Fair" is a play on words, rather than the usual Fare Thee Well?"
:)S
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Ha ha, well, no, Sharyn, actually it was just my misspelling of that time honored phrase, and I'd be lying to you if I tried to tell you otherwise, LOL. But, we're all good now, and I appreciate you keeping me grammatically correct and in-line.
Much obliged, my dear friend!:)
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I knew that dear - was just being polite. I have a dog in the fight too, so got a chuckle! Big hugs,
S
Comment from gazzagodbod
oh my godd where did you find that picture of my missus and what the hell is she doing with that other guy lol scary picture fab write sixer from me gazza
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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oh my godd where did you find that picture of my missus and what the hell is she doing with that other guy lol scary picture fab write sixer from me gazza
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Ha ha, thanks, G, I appreciate the sixer, my friend. As far as the picture, I'm not sure where it originated from, I've had it for so long. I just never had the occasion to use it until now~:)
Comment from seaglass
That's scary picture! it reminds me of nightmares I've had...me the victim. Old world feeling is conveyed with language and myth
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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That's scary picture! it reminds me of nightmares I've had...me the victim. Old world feeling is conveyed with language and myth
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thanks, seaglass. I appreciate the review.
Comment from RGstar
What a beautiful poem. Well constructed, and beautifully orchestrated.
''My carnal lust I can not quell...''
One little thing.: I would use the one word ''cannot''instead of ''can not''..as it has a hidden double meaning written that way.
Good alliteration, beautifully soft end rhymes and a lovely delivery.
Good luck in the competition.
Have a nice day,
RGstar
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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What a beautiful poem. Well constructed, and beautifully orchestrated.
''My carnal lust I can not quell...''
One little thing.: I would use the one word ''cannot''instead of ''can not''..as it has a hidden double meaning written that way.
Good alliteration, beautifully soft end rhymes and a lovely delivery.
Good luck in the competition.
Have a nice day,
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Ray, and I will make that change straight away, my friend.
I appreciate the exceptional rating and thoughtful review. Coming from a poet of your caliber, a poet who I hold in the highest regard, I am extremely grateful.
Thanks again.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Yes, we all have stories or dreams of possessing and being obsessed with such desires. You always do so well on your writing. It's funny how it goes. We get to know the writer by their writing. And so it is. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Yes, we all have stories or dreams of possessing and being obsessed with such desires. You always do so well on your writing. It's funny how it goes. We get to know the writer by their writing. And so it is. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Drew, and I am going to need lots of luck in this one, I'm afraid.
It is amazing how clearly we can detect a particular writer's own unique and personal style, even when the playing field has been so carefully leveled, as it has been here.
Although it is not winning, I was very happy with the way in which this turned out.
Thanks again for the exceptional rating and thoughtful review, my dear friend. It is appreciated!
Comment from NurseBarb
Your poem is fascinating to read with such great presentation and rhyming and flow. I had a friend who had a stalker for 2 years. This is what I imagined going through his head on a daily basis. He was so obsessed with her and it was so scary. I love that your poem is frightening, but not at all surprised. Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Your poem is fascinating to read with such great presentation and rhyming and flow. I had a friend who had a stalker for 2 years. This is what I imagined going through his head on a daily basis. He was so obsessed with her and it was so scary. I love that your poem is frightening, but not at all surprised. Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Thanks, NurseBarb, and that is a chilling story. I appreciate you sharing your friend's experience with me. As far as the contest, well, I'm not doing so hot in this one. But, it is still fairly early and one can never tell how these things will turn out.
I truly appreciate your thoughtful and encouraging comments. I needed it for this one!
Comment from chasennov
~Fair-Thee-Well~ This is quite a good poem you have created here for an contest entry. I have seen too many a time when partners choose each other at great risk to themselves. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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~Fair-Thee-Well~ This is quite a good poem you have created here for an contest entry. I have seen too many a time when partners choose each other at great risk to themselves. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Yes, there certainly are a great many couples like the ones you mention, chase.
I really appreciate the review, my friend...
Comment from hifein
well written entry for contest. you capture well how desire overcomes the fear of trying for something that you are sure will not end well. flows easily and rhyming is not forced or contrived.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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well written entry for contest. you capture well how desire overcomes the fear of trying for something that you are sure will not end well. flows easily and rhyming is not forced or contrived.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Good, hifein. I always hate it when my poems come across as forced and contrived. I always do my utmost best to avoid that.
I appreciate your review.
Comment from Acquired Taste
And so, my loathsome succubus.... well, this fulfills a darker side of love. Giving up total control of your mind, soul and passion because mortal lust takes total possession over all senses.
Yup, that is love gone wrong - but, was it really love? Great choice of photo - cloudy, white eyes...yeah, got me quivering...
Great poem - best of luck in the contest..AT=/
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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And so, my loathsome succubus.... well, this fulfills a darker side of love. Giving up total control of your mind, soul and passion because mortal lust takes total possession over all senses.
Yup, that is love gone wrong - but, was it really love? Great choice of photo - cloudy, white eyes...yeah, got me quivering...
Great poem - best of luck in the contest..AT=/
Comment Written 24-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Oh yes, Jean, we can often love those we know are just simply poisonous to us and our lives. I myself have done so on numerous occasions. Glad I got it right, finally, this last time...
Thanks for the encouraging review. I needed it!
