Hot Bath
The bare facts.27 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A fine piece of reparte with a great twist (greatly twisted?) ending. Naughty, funny, and I believe you used most of the required words. Well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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A fine piece of reparte with a great twist (greatly twisted?) ending. Naughty, funny, and I believe you used most of the required words. Well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Are you kidding me? There are required words? All for 12 bucks? Yikes! I have to do some editing. Thanks, Nancy. Used most of the words? Funny! X
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Comment from visionary1234
Oh this is hilarious! Love the way you've captured the speech patterns and painted the characters with swift, sure strokes. Conclusion is a hoot!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Oh this is hilarious! Love the way you've captured the speech patterns and painted the characters with swift, sure strokes. Conclusion is a hoot!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you, visionary. I love to write dialogue. I'm so glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from Realist101
I almost PM'd you about this contest. Great story!!! "uncovered nethers" ... classic Humpwhistle. This is another of your wonderful scenes from what could be full length movie/s! I could see, feel, hear each word! Need more sixes. Sorry Lee, this is a winner. I will remember to vote. :) Your 'biggest' fan. Susan
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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I almost PM'd you about this contest. Great story!!! "uncovered nethers" ... classic Humpwhistle. This is another of your wonderful scenes from what could be full length movie/s! I could see, feel, hear each word! Need more sixes. Sorry Lee, this is a winner. I will remember to vote. :) Your 'biggest' fan. Susan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thanks, Suse. I hope you entered this, too. We both love the Western themes. Many thanks. X
Comment from terry drake
Well I guess the wild west had its wild times after all. With women so rare in the west it was almost necessary to pin one down quick when they came along. She didn't sound like a rookie!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Well I guess the wild west had its wild times after all. With women so rare in the west it was almost necessary to pin one down quick when they came along. She didn't sound like a rookie!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Terry. I think this woman would be a tough bronc to break. Thanks again. X
Comment from DBastian
Great story! You used the Chinese stereotype language wonderfully! Your dialogue was smooth and easy to read - telling the story effectively. Even though I thought the company might be female, you delivered their interaction marvelously - the humor, the sarcasm, etc. You left much to the imagination, which I believe to be good!
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Great story! You used the Chinese stereotype language wonderfully! Your dialogue was smooth and easy to read - telling the story effectively. Even though I thought the company might be female, you delivered their interaction marvelously - the humor, the sarcasm, etc. You left much to the imagination, which I believe to be good!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, DBastian. I'm really happy to hear that you enjoy a piece that leaves something to your imagination--let's you participate. We have something in common. X
Comment from MaryYu11
This was very entertaining!! I love western anything. This was very cute. The clever words set the tone for the day when cowboys were what roamed about everywhere. Well done. I loved the twist at the end. Great job!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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This was very entertaining!! I love western anything. This was very cute. The clever words set the tone for the day when cowboys were what roamed about everywhere. Well done. I loved the twist at the end. Great job!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Mary Yu. I too love all Westerns. I'm pleased you enjoyed. X
Comment from nighttripper
Great dialogue. I really enjoyed this. Not only a gorgeous gal, witty and smart, but the new doctor as well. You told a great little short story here. The main character gets taken down a few pegs not only by the naked beauty but Chen seems a tad smarter than him as well. Good job! Loved it!
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Great dialogue. I really enjoyed this. Not only a gorgeous gal, witty and smart, but the new doctor as well. You told a great little short story here. The main character gets taken down a few pegs not only by the naked beauty but Chen seems a tad smarter than him as well. Good job! Loved it!
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, nighttripper. I'm delighted you enjoyed. X
