Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Life's Twisted Road - The End"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from Julie Helms
Well done on your completed book! Great story, with a realistic ending in that consequences still have to be paid. I enjoyed reading this throughout!
It's me â?" your grandmother (many computer gremlins, mostly in first third and last third)
"No" Isabella sighed. ( "No." Isabella sighed.)
They just left and I was writing my report (left, and I)
It's under investigation and I can't discuss that (investigation, and I)
This was a part of the job, Jackson despised (no comma)
Excellent job. Thank you so much for sharing your story with us! Julie
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Well done on your completed book! Great story, with a realistic ending in that consequences still have to be paid. I enjoyed reading this throughout!
It's me â?" your grandmother (many computer gremlins, mostly in first third and last third)
"No" Isabella sighed. ( "No." Isabella sighed.)
They just left and I was writing my report (left, and I)
It's under investigation and I can't discuss that (investigation, and I)
This was a part of the job, Jackson despised (no comma)
Excellent job. Thank you so much for sharing your story with us! Julie
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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I corrected them four times and it wouldn't save so I went ahead and replaced them with a dash. I have no idea why it would not save the changes. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your help and support.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
That's life, not always a happy ending. At least Natasha confessed, but what a pity so many lives have been ruined by her. I sort of like the ending, except for Isabella's death, and the living reality that your family has cut you off. Natasha has not changed really, unfortunately. Now what about Gabby and Dion? One more little chapter?
I hope you will get this published!
Wendy
I noticed a number of those horrid little computer gremlins.
eg "I thought â?" you're at the hospital with Mom.
Your lies are catching up with you. Either tell the truth or�¢?""
"It's God's love, Nat. This is your last chance �¢?""
"There are squad cars out front. Did you â?""
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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That's life, not always a happy ending. At least Natasha confessed, but what a pity so many lives have been ruined by her. I sort of like the ending, except for Isabella's death, and the living reality that your family has cut you off. Natasha has not changed really, unfortunately. Now what about Gabby and Dion? One more little chapter?
I hope you will get this published!
Wendy
I noticed a number of those horrid little computer gremlins.
eg "I thought â?" you're at the hospital with Mom.
Your lies are catching up with you. Either tell the truth or�¢?""
"It's God's love, Nat. This is your last chance �¢?""
"There are squad cars out front. Did you â?""
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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I don't know what happened when I posted it, but I did go back now and hopefully got all those glitches out of there. I think Isabella was happy to be with her husband again and not mixed up with all the other nonsense so in someway I think she got a happy ending. I believe Audrey and Jackson shared enough information for us to know Gabby and Dion most likely have a future together. Thank you for reading and for the review.
Smiles, Carol
PS I went back four times and changed the gremlins but they weren't saved. So finally, I eliminated them and used a dash. Hope that works!
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Yes, you seem to have fixed those annoying glitches. You are right about Dion and Gabby, I just wanted it confirmed. I hope that writing it has been in some way cathartic despite the heaviness, heartache and harsh reality of seeing both your daughter and your granddaughter so uncaring and cruel.
