Til Death and Beyond
A Days Poem19 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written days poem. When we meet the right person. We want it to carry on and never ends, even after death we like to believe we will meet again one day.
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A very well-written days poem. When we meet the right person. We want it to carry on and never ends, even after death we like to believe we will meet again one day.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh, a nice little bit of fiction, I hope? lol.
Super job with the metre and strong emotions of "love" that might have taken a we bit of a curve on the straight and narrow.
A superb Days poem, Mav and I wish you terrific luck in the booths. :)
Ange
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Oh, a nice little bit of fiction, I hope? lol.
Super job with the metre and strong emotions of "love" that might have taken a we bit of a curve on the straight and narrow.
A superb Days poem, Mav and I wish you terrific luck in the booths. :)
Ange
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from Earl Corp
This one is dark enough you need a flashlight. It does hit three of the four criteria I rate poetry on. It rhymes, it makes sense, and it drew an emotional response from me. Good job.
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This one is dark enough you need a flashlight. It does hit three of the four criteria I rate poetry on. It rhymes, it makes sense, and it drew an emotional response from me. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from robyn corum
Wowzer, Mikey,
Wasn't expecting that ending. Yuck! But I do get it. I'm getting to the age now I question my mortality a lot and try not to consider what I'd do without my hubby. He's my rock and so much more.
But I think it's 'entwined'. Thanks!
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Wowzer, Mikey,
Wasn't expecting that ending. Yuck! But I do get it. I'm getting to the age now I question my mortality a lot and try not to consider what I'd do without my hubby. He's my rock and so much more.
But I think it's 'entwined'. Thanks!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
I am not keen of this form but I have to say that in your hands here it has been turned into a fascinating piece of poetry. Commencing as a conventional enough poem of love between two people it has a subtle turn into the essential ingredients of a murder ballad by the end.
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I am not keen of this form but I have to say that in your hands here it has been turned into a fascinating piece of poetry. Commencing as a conventional enough poem of love between two people it has a subtle turn into the essential ingredients of a murder ballad by the end.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from apky
I think this is just a wonderful story of true love
written in the poetic form. I'm no great poet and
may never help you with all the grand nuances, but
I still loved the story. Always a romantic at heart,
even the sad ending is all about true love.
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I think this is just a wonderful story of true love
written in the poetic form. I'm no great poet and
may never help you with all the grand nuances, but
I still loved the story. Always a romantic at heart,
even the sad ending is all about true love.
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from country ranch writer
beautiful work up for your poem it says it all. sad one has taken ones life to be with their loved one. Good luck in the contest.
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beautiful work up for your poem it says it all. sad one has taken ones life to be with their loved one. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Michael, been a while since we passed in the halls. I wish there was a seven-star rating, this would have it in a heartbeat. The best poem I have read in a quite a while, I adore it and read it numerous times. It's like a beautiful deep blue velvet dress you want to wear. It makes the grave sound tempting, just a few shades darker and you're in the black. So smooth and luscious. But it is a tragedy, in truth.
I'll let the stars to the talking, keep writing, and hopefully, we collide again soon. Lv, Ana.
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Hello Michael, been a while since we passed in the halls. I wish there was a seven-star rating, this would have it in a heartbeat. The best poem I have read in a quite a while, I adore it and read it numerous times. It's like a beautiful deep blue velvet dress you want to wear. It makes the grave sound tempting, just a few shades darker and you're in the black. So smooth and luscious. But it is a tragedy, in truth.
I'll let the stars to the talking, keep writing, and hopefully, we collide again soon. Lv, Ana.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Wow what a wonderful thought out day poem. Perfect iambic Pentameter in your couplet and perfect rhyme scheme of was a and exactly 4 syllables in each 3rd line of each Stanza. This will do well, A winner, for sure.
Great job
Regards
Tia
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Hi
Wow what a wonderful thought out day poem. Perfect iambic Pentameter in your couplet and perfect rhyme scheme of was a and exactly 4 syllables in each 3rd line of each Stanza. This will do well, A winner, for sure.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 19-Nov-2018
