Hot Bath
The bare facts.27 total reviews
Comment from Gargantuan2
Hmm, how to offend a rash in ten easy lessons.. hehe.. honestly, it was pretty good stuff. You do western jargon fairly well too. Good luck when the voting comes around, I don't see any reason why it couldn't do well, though.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Hmm, how to offend a rash in ten easy lessons.. hehe.. honestly, it was pretty good stuff. You do western jargon fairly well too. Good luck when the voting comes around, I don't see any reason why it couldn't do well, though.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Gar. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Patti R.
Lol! Yes, one must be careful about sassing the rashes!..
This is a terrific short western, funny, flash write. You made me smile and I was caught from the get-go.
Good humor.
Good setting/character development/conflict/all that good story stuff.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Lol! Yes, one must be careful about sassing the rashes!..
This is a terrific short western, funny, flash write. You made me smile and I was caught from the get-go.
Good humor.
Good setting/character development/conflict/all that good story stuff.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Patti. I'm so glad you enjoyed my little story. Peace, Lee
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your "Western Flash Fiction" Story, Hot Bath, is GREAT! I love the fact that the doctor was a female and had to bathe everyday. That is why she didn't view the body as a sexual thing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Your "Western Flash Fiction" Story, Hot Bath, is GREAT! I love the fact that the doctor was a female and had to bathe everyday. That is why she didn't view the body as a sexual thing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, William. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from Silverlock
Loved this entry in the Western flash fiction! Great humour, easy conversation, and all the required words used well. Good luck, you'll get my vote ;)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Loved this entry in the Western flash fiction! Great humour, easy conversation, and all the required words used well. Good luck, you'll get my vote ;)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Silverlock. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You are most welcome. And congratulations, I see you did win the contest - well done!
Regards, Barb
Comment from Ure Connection
Great story,
I hope you develop it further into a novella or full length. A local librarian told me Westerns were becoming rare. Everything was about modern cowboys etc. Maybe this is a prize winner.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Great story,
I hope you develop it further into a novella or full length. A local librarian told me Westerns were becoming rare. Everything was about modern cowboys etc. Maybe this is a prize winner.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, Ure. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from ennahanid
This is just a great story this flash fiction entry and in my mind's eye I saw it go a lot further and ending a happy ending for the drifter with the neck rash and the doctor...thanks for the good time and the chuckle this afternoon - Dinah
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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This is just a great story this flash fiction entry and in my mind's eye I saw it go a lot further and ending a happy ending for the drifter with the neck rash and the doctor...thanks for the good time and the chuckle this afternoon - Dinah
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Dinah, I agree. This story has some legs. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Peace, Lee
Comment from judiverse
This is certainly not your typical Western story. Very interesting and humorous. The dialogue and the Chinaman's dialect were great and sounded realistic. Nothing is wasted in this. You really made every word count. You also did a great job of describing the setting. You build up nicely to the last bit, which is the surprise, about the comely woman in the second tub is a doctor. Well done! judiverse
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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This is certainly not your typical Western story. Very interesting and humorous. The dialogue and the Chinaman's dialect were great and sounded realistic. Nothing is wasted in this. You really made every word count. You also did a great job of describing the setting. You build up nicely to the last bit, which is the surprise, about the comely woman in the second tub is a doctor. Well done! judiverse
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
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Thank you, judiverse. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You're welcome, Lee. I found it very enjoyable. judiverse
Comment from MumEsGirl
cute, witty and light hearted. Our pal certainly got an educated partner in the room. I love the idea of this being set anywhere the imagination takes the reader
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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cute, witty and light hearted. Our pal certainly got an educated partner in the room. I love the idea of this being set anywhere the imagination takes the reader
hugs
kate
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, Kate. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from adewpearl
on behalf of concubines and cowboys everywhere, I ain't accepting your apology! Duel at thirty paces, please :-)
six week's time - should be weeks' since plural possessive
love the verb choice of slosh
great description of the bather, comely as they come :-)
she's the new doctor - that is so funny!!! LOL
some great visuals in this one as he quick covers his nether region and then when he gets an instant wilty picturing his schoolmarm nekkid. LOL :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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on behalf of concubines and cowboys everywhere, I ain't accepting your apology! Duel at thirty paces, please :-)
six week's time - should be weeks' since plural possessive
love the verb choice of slosh
great description of the bather, comely as they come :-)
she's the new doctor - that is so funny!!! LOL
some great visuals in this one as he quick covers his nether region and then when he gets an instant wilty picturing his schoolmarm nekkid. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Brooke.
'as comely as they come' is a favorite of mine.
Aside from Etta Place, nekkid schoolmarms are might scary.
Thanks agin. X
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this story about the cowboy and the doctor sharing a bath and conversation. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this story about the cowboy and the doctor sharing a bath and conversation. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, sweetie. I'm glad you enjoyed. X
