Everything Is Going To Be Alright
Tears are a blessing from our bodies78 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written four-line poem. Sometimes we need to cry to wash our souls clean again with our years. We need to see things in a new perspective from time to time.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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A very well-written four-line poem. Sometimes we need to cry to wash our souls clean again with our years. We need to see things in a new perspective from time to time.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Hi Sandra... thanks for the stellar review... I need to cry sometimes and yes I feel freed from the burden. yours, diana
Comment from royowen
There's a sort of release when it comes to tears. As a male I was raised in a time when tears weren't "fashionable" for boys, but my children (both girls) discovered I was a closet "weeper", particularly concerning them, but they don't tell on their dad. Beautifully and wisely written my friend, yes, I wish men would cry more instead of bottling it up. Beautifully written entry in this fouling poetry contest. A qualifier, you've said a lot in a few words, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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There's a sort of release when it comes to tears. As a male I was raised in a time when tears weren't "fashionable" for boys, but my children (both girls) discovered I was a closet "weeper", particularly concerning them, but they don't tell on their dad. Beautifully and wisely written my friend, yes, I wish men would cry more instead of bottling it up. Beautifully written entry in this fouling poetry contest. A qualifier, you've said a lot in a few words, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Hi roy... it upsets me to know that boys (men) don't cry and as you said become closet cryers. Who mandated that ridiculous edict. I'll give them something to cry about. yours, diana
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Heh heh, I think it was my mum, Diane
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You Do? Heh
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I'm afraid so. Heh heh
Comment from Rio Elizabeth
I think this is strong and sweet and true all at once. Really a beautiful short little poem. i think you achieved a real completion in this four line exercise. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I think this is strong and sweet and true all at once. Really a beautiful short little poem. i think you achieved a real completion in this four line exercise. Congratulations.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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That is the goal isn't it rio... finding a story in a thimble. thanks for the read. looking forward. yours, diana
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Tears of grief release to help us cope and when sweet colour comes to our eyes we are infused with some relief, I could identify with your words, good luck with the contest, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Tears of grief release to help us cope and when sweet colour comes to our eyes we are infused with some relief, I could identify with your words, good luck with the contest, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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thanks sweet Dolly... crossing my fingers. yours, diana
Comment from robyn corum
AA,
I have no idea how you've done this, but you need to fix it pretty quick before someone freaks out on you. *smile* It seems you have two identical entries into the same contest?? That is so weird. If what I'm seeing is real, I would strongly suggest you delete one of them. Good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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AA,
I have no idea how you've done this, but you need to fix it pretty quick before someone freaks out on you. *smile* It seems you have two identical entries into the same contest?? That is so weird. If what I'm seeing is real, I would strongly suggest you delete one of them. Good luck!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Robyn thanks for this note. I have no idea why the same post ended up duplicated on my site? How does that happen. I wrote Tom instantly. It took a second for the second post to show up and I deleted. Lost some reviews but stopped panicking. yours, diana
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hahahaha! Yes, that was bizarre. The site won't even let you have a post with the same name, so I couldn't figure it out at all. (Of course, I have a tiny brain to begin with. *smile*) Thanks!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Four Line Poem writing prompt.
You talk of the relief of tears and paint a nice picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Four Line Poem writing prompt.
You talk of the relief of tears and paint a nice picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Hey Sharon thanks for you stellar review and thoughts and good wishes. yours, diana
Comment from Robert Mitchell
As I said, the picture wasn't necessary for me to get the feeling you were trying to convey. I liked how the last line ended in a rhyme, "release, relief", even not strictly a rhyme the two words begin in the same way as well as being synonymous. Did you spend a lot of time trying to figure out the second word? I often write poetry in draft then go back and choose particular words as the rhyme; then pound my head against the wall trying to come up with the right word. Rhyming adds a memorable quality to poems. I think musically, although I can't play any music accept on the CD player (I'm getting better ;on Amazon music). By thinking in how the poem would sound to music, the poetry has the greatest impact. It can become that tune you can't get out of you head. I see your poem as a great refrain, maybe, in a larger story. Tears. Caress and release. Painful memories... Best of all, I don't need to take a special art understanding class to get meaning, It really is beautiful. You exemplify how less is more in this poem. Thanks, Bob
PS This is my first review. I'm glad it had to be of yours and not something I didn't like.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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As I said, the picture wasn't necessary for me to get the feeling you were trying to convey. I liked how the last line ended in a rhyme, "release, relief", even not strictly a rhyme the two words begin in the same way as well as being synonymous. Did you spend a lot of time trying to figure out the second word? I often write poetry in draft then go back and choose particular words as the rhyme; then pound my head against the wall trying to come up with the right word. Rhyming adds a memorable quality to poems. I think musically, although I can't play any music accept on the CD player (I'm getting better ;on Amazon music). By thinking in how the poem would sound to music, the poetry has the greatest impact. It can become that tune you can't get out of you head. I see your poem as a great refrain, maybe, in a larger story. Tears. Caress and release. Painful memories... Best of all, I don't need to take a special art understanding class to get meaning, It really is beautiful. You exemplify how less is more in this poem. Thanks, Bob
PS This is my first review. I'm glad it had to be of yours and not something I didn't like.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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You know Robert... I have a funny writing brain. I tend to think in the writer's brain. Like you I'm sure... in the contest i'm give a discipline of 1,5,5,9. Then as soon as I think of The word like tears I can see the middle and the end and have to come up with the middle. It isn't that difficult if you have the first and last concepts. The words spill out incorrectly or poorly said at which point I take the simplicity out and try to for a full picture on each line. Anyway, Robert I am so honored to have received your eloquent, thoughtful review. Your words were perfectly pluck an placed. thanks so much! I'm honored.
Comment from Air Spirit
I love your poem and the message is clear and true. Tears, although they help heal and cleanse us are a precious commodity that's so many of us are stingy with.. in terms of sharing with others -- and yet it's an act wherein we finally surrender the pretense and the masks we wear.. it is an act of intimacy that is often avoided it at all costs - and yet we pay such a high price for doing so.. thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I love your poem and the message is clear and true. Tears, although they help heal and cleanse us are a precious commodity that's so many of us are stingy with.. in terms of sharing with others -- and yet it's an act wherein we finally surrender the pretense and the masks we wear.. it is an act of intimacy that is often avoided it at all costs - and yet we pay such a high price for doing so.. thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Spirit... you are so right. I used to be able to cry much better than I can now... I'm trying not to be so stingy. Thanks for your stellar review along with your cool message. Again, the world could use a lot more intimacy. yours, diana
