Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I see what you've done here--the stars reflect in the ocean's water and you're swimming in the ocean, thus you're swimming in the stars.

This is romantic and I like the focus on the natural world.

Thanks for sharing the Dodoitsu poem.

xoxo

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi there Pam, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary

Excellent

Debi,

This is a wonderful poem. I don't think there's anything you can't make sound good. I love the picture you chose to go with this poem it compliments it nicely.

Great job my sweet friend

Cecilia

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Cecilia, many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 06-Feb-2025

You are welcome my sweet friend. I hope all is going well with you. I hope the infection clears up so you can get that surgery.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-You did a good job with the poem and topic.
-You set the scene very well in the opening lines.
-Effective imagery with the sparkle of the ocean.
-A very good concluding line,
and I like the twist!
-Very well done.

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Pam, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi

reply by Pam (respa) on 06-Feb-2025

You are very welcome, Debi, and I appreciate your reply.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Dear Debi,
Oh-La-La! This is delicious Japanese poetry, my friend. Beautifully written and presented in this poetry form new to me. Thank you for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always, and my best for the Zen Poem challenge.
Love,
Sal XOs


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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025

Hi Sal, many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi