Roses Choc'late Wine
A valentine poem: 20 syllables25 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Chrissy!
Your poem has all of the ingredients to make a Valentine's Day extra special!
However, there are two nits that need to be addressed:
Valentine your (you're) mine;
Roses, choc'late, wine.
Kisses, hug me tight,
I'll be your's (yours) tonight.
Hoping I have helped and not offended.
Best Wishes!
diane
All set!
diane
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hello Chrissy!
Your poem has all of the ingredients to make a Valentine's Day extra special!
However, there are two nits that need to be addressed:
Valentine your (you're) mine;
Roses, choc'late, wine.
Kisses, hug me tight,
I'll be your's (yours) tonight.
Hoping I have helped and not offended.
Best Wishes!
diane
All set!
diane
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hi Diane Thanks and of course you have not offended me sometimes my mind just doesn?t see the obvious I did deliberate over the last your?s but now have fixed it . hope you get a rose or two Cheers Chris x
Comment from Ricky1024
"Roses Choc'late Wine"
Is a Valentine's day Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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"Roses Choc'late Wine"
Is a Valentine's day Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Ricky, Thank heaps for your review glad you enjoyed my poem and wish you a happy Valentine's day my friend Cheersw Christine
Comment from lyenochka
All those things remind me of Valentine's Day. I like how you structured the list neatly in four lines of 5 syllables.
Comments:
"Valentine your mine;" (Valentine, you're mine;)
"I'll be your's tonight." (yours)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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All those things remind me of Valentine's Day. I like how you structured the list neatly in four lines of 5 syllables.
Comments:
"Valentine your mine;" (Valentine, you're mine;)
"I'll be your's tonight." (yours)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Helen, Thanks for your and have fixed the spags sometimes my head is not on straight LOL ( actually most of the time Ha ha. Cheers Chris
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello Chrissie, nice to see you at FS today. I enjoyed your poem, it has classic imagery for this event, Valentines Day. I notice it is for the competition, so best of luck and thanks for sharing this nicely worded and published poem, cheers, Eve.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hello Chrissie, nice to see you at FS today. I enjoyed your poem, it has classic imagery for this event, Valentines Day. I notice it is for the competition, so best of luck and thanks for sharing this nicely worded and published poem, cheers, Eve.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Eve, Thanks for your review and I am a bit random with my posts, can go weeks and then have a rush on a bit of fun for the contest here Cheers Christine
Comment from royowen
I was wondering why all the Valentine's Day poems were so short, turning to the contest conditions, I saw that it was 20 syllables only. Duh...that's why. Beautifully written Chris, the count is perfect, and the words are very sexy, well done, good luck dear friend, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I was wondering why all the Valentine's Day poems were so short, turning to the contest conditions, I saw that it was 20 syllables only. Duh...that's why. Beautifully written Chris, the count is perfect, and the words are very sexy, well done, good luck dear friend, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Roy, Thanks heaps for your review and yes they are short this time had fun fitting in all the valentines things into 20 syllables, a little hidden meaning too Ha ha Cheers hope you and Elaine had a lovely day Cheers my friend Chris
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Well done Chris
