Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this Tri-Fall poem with me. I love being on FanStory - I can learn so many different forms of poetry just by reading through the board.

The poem flows well, and though you managed to keep to the rhyme scheme and syllable count, you didn't force any rhymes.

Well done,
~patty~
ps; I was very sorry to hear about your son

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from jmcfadden1528

Good

I really enjoyed the story this poem tells. The imagery you use evokes very vivid images. One thing I would work on is trying to make the rhyme scheme fit a little better. Example: "lair" and "there" rhyme, but it would rhyme better with "fair" or a similar word. Other than that, I enjoyed this poem a lot.

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 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

I think that humans, animals, plants, trees, stars and the moon are all connected. I say, shoot for the moon, and you'll get there. Thanks for a great piece.
Bill~

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Excellent

I LIKE WHAT YOU HAVE DONE AND THE COLORS MAKE IT JUST AS ELLIGENT AS THE WRITE ITSELF. THIS IS ONE OF THE BETTER ONES I HAVE READ TODAY THANKS FOR SHARING

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
Your words to me is so divine.
I thank you for sharing them with me.
Cookie

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Twilight brings forth the ending of the day and gives the night life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very good, nicely done on the tri fall with dreamy, the rhyme and rhythm is good, reads and flows great. Thanks for the share on this and have a great day

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from G.B. Smith

Excellent

Hey there Luna

I loved this and the thoughts it instilled in my imagination

You have a superb entry into the Tri-Fall contest
I wish you well. You have a grand way of expression

Bear

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016

HeyBear! How have you been?

Great to see you.

Thanks for your read and review.

I'll put myself on your fan list

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem and a very interesting format which I would like to try. We have nothing to fear after our life in earth is over. There will be comfort in the eternal life.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I have never heard of this form before so I am at the mercy of the notes.
Excellent rhyme and flow and I love the content 'love's heavenly lair' makes it sound so peaceful

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2016