Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "A Scandalous Affair"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from gypsycaravan
I think many have someone who just couldn't enter or remain in our life at the proper time. The feelings remain but can never be played out. Maybe in a next life? Nice work and reminder for me of that person. :-)
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I think many have someone who just couldn't enter or remain in our life at the proper time. The feelings remain but can never be played out. Maybe in a next life? Nice work and reminder for me of that person. :-)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from tfawcus
Most appropriate colouring for this scarlet affair! Some nice touches in this, 'soul's sky' and your lovely description of the way time has not marred her beauty. Old flames can still burn, can't they. OK, as long as it does not become a wildfire.
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Most appropriate colouring for this scarlet affair! Some nice touches in this, 'soul's sky' and your lovely description of the way time has not marred her beauty. Old flames can still burn, can't they. OK, as long as it does not become a wildfire.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, Mikey, this is really, really good - extremely original, IMO - especially the cadence when read aloud. I enjoyed it very much, and found the presentation wonderful as well. One nit - Capital W for "with honour..." since all the rest are that are full sentences.
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Wow, Mikey, this is really, really good - extremely original, IMO - especially the cadence when read aloud. I enjoyed it very much, and found the presentation wonderful as well. One nit - Capital W for "with honour..." since all the rest are that are full sentences.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
This was interesting.
'A scandalous affair' hidden underneath and denied over the years to re-surface at a moment's glance for just a second or two and then shoved back down beneath.
liked this one with its excellent form.
G
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Hi Mikey,
This was interesting.
'A scandalous affair' hidden underneath and denied over the years to re-surface at a moment's glance for just a second or two and then shoved back down beneath.
liked this one with its excellent form.
G
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from Deborah Marie
Well penned contest entry. Color scheme is good along with the message... I hope that this never, ever happens to me. Nice progression, rhythm and flow. Good luck in the contest, Deb
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Well penned contest entry. Color scheme is good along with the message... I hope that this never, ever happens to me. Nice progression, rhythm and flow. Good luck in the contest, Deb
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from Sankey
Wishing you well old mate. Lovely romance naughty I think if you are another's love in marriage. Not a sin unless you actually did something adulterous. Nothing wrong in temptation just wrong if ya give in. Loved the layout and colour buddy. Emotion abounds as well.
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Wishing you well old mate. Lovely romance naughty I think if you are another's love in marriage. Not a sin unless you actually did something adulterous. Nothing wrong in temptation just wrong if ya give in. Loved the layout and colour buddy. Emotion abounds as well.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from linsbm
Love is never been a wrong thing and if it happens it involves time. You cannot get away with it. And like what this poem expressed, mind thoughts and heart's desire work together even more, even beyond personal circumstances not by need but love. What happens in this poem is reality.
I enjoyed reading this Sonnet. The concluding two lines are just perfect, so be it.} Lin
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Love is never been a wrong thing and if it happens it involves time. You cannot get away with it. And like what this poem expressed, mind thoughts and heart's desire work together even more, even beyond personal circumstances not by need but love. What happens in this poem is reality.
I enjoyed reading this Sonnet. The concluding two lines are just perfect, so be it.} Lin
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
Flawless mechanics. You don not let form, rhyme or meter hinder you as you tell this story. Many original lines with exquisite imagery. I think their actions prove their integrity. It is a sacrifice it seems. They show no bitterness having made it grateful for the love they share in the only way they can share it ... apart.
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Flawless mechanics. You don not let form, rhyme or meter hinder you as you tell this story. Many original lines with exquisite imagery. I think their actions prove their integrity. It is a sacrifice it seems. They show no bitterness having made it grateful for the love they share in the only way they can share it ... apart.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Hi Michael - A scandalous Affair? Well, that is in the eye of the beholder. When two people who have shared something very special drift apart, there is always a little of the spark they once had left behind in each of them. If perchance they meet again in the future, that spark may ignite, or it may just simmer below the surface, as each one struggles with their own conscience. I do love the set out you used in your sonnet....the black and fiery red is perfect for the subject.
Regards
Annette
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Hi Michael - A scandalous Affair? Well, that is in the eye of the beholder. When two people who have shared something very special drift apart, there is always a little of the spark they once had left behind in each of them. If perchance they meet again in the future, that spark may ignite, or it may just simmer below the surface, as each one struggles with their own conscience. I do love the set out you used in your sonnet....the black and fiery red is perfect for the subject.
Regards
Annette
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey; I enjoyed reading your sonnet it was an interesting poem well-deserved In the constitutional aspects of love. Use of masculine rhymes( rhymes with the stress is on the second syllable) like "again" and "desire". In most of your single syllable rhymes were also masculine rhymes. All of these rhymes were neither forced nor labored and very helpful in the rhythmic flow but more importantly they were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line. The rhythmic tempo and meter were done fairly well and struggled only in a few lines were used triple and
quadruple syllable words where the stress were not accented in the proper meter. Otherwise most of the rhythmic cadence, timing and meter are done so well that make the reading clear, fluid and easy. The romantic part of your sonnet showed so true in the imagery that was very descriptive and expressive. Good luck in the contest and may the Lord be with you.
Alex
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Mikey; I enjoyed reading your sonnet it was an interesting poem well-deserved In the constitutional aspects of love. Use of masculine rhymes( rhymes with the stress is on the second syllable) like "again" and "desire". In most of your single syllable rhymes were also masculine rhymes. All of these rhymes were neither forced nor labored and very helpful in the rhythmic flow but more importantly they were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line. The rhythmic tempo and meter were done fairly well and struggled only in a few lines were used triple and
quadruple syllable words where the stress were not accented in the proper meter. Otherwise most of the rhythmic cadence, timing and meter are done so well that make the reading clear, fluid and easy. The romantic part of your sonnet showed so true in the imagery that was very descriptive and expressive. Good luck in the contest and may the Lord be with you.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
