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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "To Lie Down in Green Pastures"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from Nosha17
When that happens there will definitely be a change for the best-the animals will show us the way. What a lovely picture. Lovely words to convey this spiritual message. Good use of rhyming and an enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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When that happens there will definitely be a change for the best-the animals will show us the way. What a lovely picture. Lovely words to convey this spiritual message. Good use of rhyming and an enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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It certainly will be a wonderful time. Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and the message, Faye. I appreciate the good luck wishes too.
Comment from amahra
Just to think, creation started out with the lion lying down beside the lamb. And when the earth turned against man, became the beginning of lamb chops.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Just to think, creation started out with the lion lying down beside the lamb. And when the earth turned against man, became the beginning of lamb chops.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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LOL. You are so right. Poor little lamb. Thank you for the generous stars and a good chuckle.
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. Great rhyme scheme used. Great use of descriptive words used. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. Great rhyme scheme used. Great use of descriptive words used. Best of luck.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging comments and best wishes. I appreciate it.
Comment from ravenblack
Good use of Terza Rima, I just find it almost comical that the cow and the bear should reside in peace- it is against their nature's. Now, I do understand it as metaphorical for complete peace. Give James Dickey's poem, " The Heaven of Animals " a read. It should be somewhere on the web.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Good use of Terza Rima, I just find it almost comical that the cow and the bear should reside in peace- it is against their nature's. Now, I do understand it as metaphorical for complete peace. Give James Dickey's poem, " The Heaven of Animals " a read. It should be somewhere on the web.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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LOL. It is a bit much to take in, a cow and bear, or any of the other natural enemies getting along. We know them as predator and prey and how could they ever trust each other?
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing.
I did look up "The Heaven of Animals." It is quite a different concept, with the animals continuing to fulfill their purpose and doing it over and over again. No little children in that Heaven of animals for sure. Thank you for the recommendation. It was an enjoyable read. I'll have to read more of his works .
Comment from onebrit
This is such a nice idea, but considering the way the world is now I think its somewhat unlikely. Seems as if its getting more violent every day, and our world leaders seem incapable of making any change. I like the use of rhyme and feel that you are hopeful, unfortunately I am not.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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This is such a nice idea, but considering the way the world is now I think its somewhat unlikely. Seems as if its getting more violent every day, and our world leaders seem incapable of making any change. I like the use of rhyme and feel that you are hopeful, unfortunately I am not.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the kind remarks about the writing. I appreciate your insights about the state of the world too. Unfortunately the world does have a lot of corruption in it, but there are a lot of good people doing good deeds too. I think it was Tolstoy who once said something like there will never be justice in the world, but we still have to strive for it as if there could be.
I appreciate your encouragement and the generous stars. Thank you so much.
Looks like you are new to the site. I look forward to reading your works. Welcome.
Comment from Just2Write
Nice tie into the books of the bible that speak of a time when the lion shall lay down with the lamb - a time of peace that instills calm in the reader. Your Terza Rima form is right on. Although there is no set meter for Terza Rima - iambic pentameter is normally preferred.
The artwork is a beautiful match to the words of your poem.
Rose
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Nice tie into the books of the bible that speak of a time when the lion shall lay down with the lamb - a time of peace that instills calm in the reader. Your Terza Rima form is right on. Although there is no set meter for Terza Rima - iambic pentameter is normally preferred.
The artwork is a beautiful match to the words of your poem.
Rose
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Rose. I see several different descriptions of Terza Rima online. One says it always has eleven syllables but no set meter, and another says exactly what you say about no required meter, but iambic pentameter preferred. I am a little tired of iambic lately so I took a freer interpretation.
I appreciate your comments about the theme. I like the artwork too. There are some talented artists on our sister site.
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It's great to experiment with meter. I too am growing weary of iambic pentameter - but iambic seems to be the backbone of many forms. I'm branching out - glad to see that I'm not alone.
Comment from solcates
Excellent! Motivated me, inspired me, for sure I would read to my granddaughters. continue with the excellent work .One book simple and easy to understand , would be great for kids and anyone who seeks God's word.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Excellent! Motivated me, inspired me, for sure I would read to my granddaughters. continue with the excellent work .One book simple and easy to understand , would be great for kids and anyone who seeks God's word.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments in your review and welcome to the site.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write mystery writer, you did na excellent job writing this terza rima about earth after it is purged by fire and a new Heaven and new earth are formed. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent write mystery writer, you did na excellent job writing this terza rima about earth after it is purged by fire and a new Heaven and new earth are formed. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the six stars! You have brightened my day with the extra gold star and with your kind comments. Thank you for the good luck wishes as well. I appreciate it.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a wonderful poem of faith. Your rhyme scheme is spot on for the terza rima. Good luck to you in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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This is a wonderful poem of faith. Your rhyme scheme is spot on for the terza rima. Good luck to you in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging comments and good luck wishes, Teresa. They are much appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like the message of your poem. The picture with the words are a perfect match. I enjoyed reading your poem. One thing that I would change is the word 'their' as in 'their friends.' Did you mean to say 'they're ' as in they are friends. Anyway, your poem is very nice with a special message. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I like the message of your poem. The picture with the words are a perfect match. I enjoyed reading your poem. One thing that I would change is the word 'their' as in 'their friends.' Did you mean to say 'they're ' as in they are friends. Anyway, your poem is very nice with a special message. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the great review.
Actually, I meant that the leopards and goats were playing with their friends the calf and lion. I do appreciate you pointing out the different interpretation that you got from it though. Hmm. I'll give it a think since that is a nice meaning too.
Thank you for the thoughtful comments. I appreciate it.
