Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Seasons"a place to gather my poetic forms
51 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
Greetings, Moonchild! I just dropped by to read your poem. It speaks beautifully, playfully of the seasons. My favorite lines are:
Throughout the thicket, one will find
the ties which spring to summer bind.
I'm in recovery myself, and professionally work with addicts. It's such a mystery that those who can give back to other addicts, have such trouble staying clean and sober themselves. I'm glad that you seem to have such a splendid support system both here and at home, and that you have your talent in writing poetry to share with the rest of us. Caroline
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Greetings, Moonchild! I just dropped by to read your poem. It speaks beautifully, playfully of the seasons. My favorite lines are:
Throughout the thicket, one will find
the ties which spring to summer bind.
I'm in recovery myself, and professionally work with addicts. It's such a mystery that those who can give back to other addicts, have such trouble staying clean and sober themselves. I'm glad that you seem to have such a splendid support system both here and at home, and that you have your talent in writing poetry to share with the rest of us. Caroline
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Dear Caroline, I'm in recovery myself also. The question that you pose though is indeed a mystery. i appreciate your reference to my bereavement, and yes, I do have a swell support system not only here on this site but in RL as well. Thank you for this review and for telling me your favorite lines.
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi Jeni,
I think you've wrapped up the seasons of the year quite nicely. You are very creative in the way you represent the characteristics of each season (Orion high in the sky, Daffodils blooming, etc.). Nicely conceived and executed. I was anxious to see how you would portray the other seasons after rewarding your first stanza.
It's a very enjoyable read!. Wishing you well,
Alan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Hi Jeni,
I think you've wrapped up the seasons of the year quite nicely. You are very creative in the way you represent the characteristics of each season (Orion high in the sky, Daffodils blooming, etc.). Nicely conceived and executed. I was anxious to see how you would portray the other seasons after rewarding your first stanza.
It's a very enjoyable read!. Wishing you well,
Alan
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you Alan! I'm happy that you enjoyed the poem and the way the characteristics of each season were represented.
I'm happy to call you my friend.
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You are welcome. And ditto on the friendship!!!!
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Terrific imagery and rhyming qualities expressed in this writing, Luna. You've done a wonderful job of creating a scenic image for your readers ... orion's high now in the sky, he means that fall is passing by. Old Man Winter will soon descent, bears hibernate 'til winter's end.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Terrific imagery and rhyming qualities expressed in this writing, Luna. You've done a wonderful job of creating a scenic image for your readers ... orion's high now in the sky, he means that fall is passing by. Old Man Winter will soon descent, bears hibernate 'til winter's end.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and for leaving such a kind review.
Comment from jusylee72
Beautiful and descriptive showing the changes. Orion the picture you showed brought back lots of memories. When we were little we moved so much because my Dad was in the air force. When ever we got to a new place he would show me Orion up in the sky to show me we were still in the same world.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Beautiful and descriptive showing the changes. Orion the picture you showed brought back lots of memories. When we were little we moved so much because my Dad was in the air force. When ever we got to a new place he would show me Orion up in the sky to show me we were still in the same world.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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Aww Jusylee, that is just like me! It wasn't my father who showed me Orion, but my study of the constellations as a small child. He was always my favorite and we had many meaningful talks while I was lying on the ground in the late fall.
Jeni
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I love this poem about season's changes. You use great imagery and "turn of words" to express your feelings about the changes of nature.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I love this poem about season's changes. You use great imagery and "turn of words" to express your feelings about the changes of nature.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Rhonda, I'm certainly glad that you enjoyed this. Thanks for this kiind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem of the "Seasons" has a nice three hundred and sixty degree coverage of the indications of the one time of year relenting to the next.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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This poem of the "Seasons" has a nice three hundred and sixty degree coverage of the indications of the one time of year relenting to the next.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem, Bill, and appreciate your kind review.
Comment from wondertwin
This was a very enjoyable poem to read. You did a great job incorporating all the seasons in an original way. Nicely done,. Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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This was a very enjoyable poem to read. You did a great job incorporating all the seasons in an original way. Nicely done,. Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Amy Jo. I appreciate your read and gracious review.
Comment from Thal1959
The meter is predominantly a tetrameter, that jumbles at times with a pentameter, but this is OK as you mentioned it above. I am just saying it is not necessarily "meter-challenged." A straightforward a,a,b,b rhyme scheme, and the expressions and thoughts conveyed are well composed. Very nice.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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The meter is predominantly a tetrameter, that jumbles at times with a pentameter, but this is OK as you mentioned it above. I am just saying it is not necessarily "meter-challenged." A straightforward a,a,b,b rhyme scheme, and the expressions and thoughts conveyed are well composed. Very nice.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Thal. I appreciate you reading this and leaving this kind review.
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Its a pleasure, Luna.
Comment from Lu Saluna
That's terrific! I am happy our Haiku Club is inspiring creativity!
Your poem is wonderful. It is lovely how you meander through the seasons and touch on something special in nature for each of the seasons. My favourite stanza is the second; I love ducklings. They are so cute and fuzzy one of the most adorable things about spring time.
Awesome poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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That's terrific! I am happy our Haiku Club is inspiring creativity!
Your poem is wonderful. It is lovely how you meander through the seasons and touch on something special in nature for each of the seasons. My favourite stanza is the second; I love ducklings. They are so cute and fuzzy one of the most adorable things about spring time.
Awesome poem.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Maybe one of these days I'll actually get enough courage to write a haiku!
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Join our club, we will help you learn how. We have an on-line chat room where talk about them and help each other. Everyone is friendly and helpful and we have lots of resources to help you out. Contact Gypsy and let her know if you are interested. They are so much fun.
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OK, I will, thamks!
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Cool!
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Thanks for your wonderful poem on seasons.... For me, I think when spring knocks at your door, regardless of the time of year or season of our lives, run, do not walk to that door, throw it open with wild abandon, say, "Yes! Yes, come in!
Bill~
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thanks for your wonderful poem on seasons.... For me, I think when spring knocks at your door, regardless of the time of year or season of our lives, run, do not walk to that door, throw it open with wild abandon, say, "Yes! Yes, come in!
Bill~
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Bill. I appreciate your read and review. Hey, just as an aside, you assigned a four-ustar rating to this piece which means "needs work." Can you tell my what work I could do to improve my poem?
You're the best.
