Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Nobody's Child"a place to gather my poetic forms
56 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
"Just" a poem that reminds you, huh - well, it's one of the best nonets I've read on this site - I LOVED it. Your words create a definite atmosphere - I can darn near see that gal, feel her need, where she comes from, where she's headed...six-worthy, if I had one (and I'm glad I didn't miss this)!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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"Just" a poem that reminds you, huh - well, it's one of the best nonets I've read on this site - I LOVED it. Your words create a definite atmosphere - I can darn near see that gal, feel her need, where she comes from, where she's headed...six-worthy, if I had one (and I'm glad I didn't miss this)!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Dawn! I appreciate the virtual six! Your very complimentary review has my heart warmed. It's good that you could feel the imagery in this poem, and I'm happy that you told me.
Love,
jeni
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's hard when you're trying to find love in all the wrong places. I read things like this and I know that it could have easily been me that you wrote this about. I got lucky, not sure how that even happened. You did a great job and I hope this younger gal you wrote this about is able to find happiness.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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It's hard when you're trying to find love in all the wrong places. I read things like this and I know that it could have easily been me that you wrote this about. I got lucky, not sure how that even happened. You did a great job and I hope this younger gal you wrote this about is able to find happiness.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Hi, again, this WAS me when I was younger, unfortunately, although the piece is not entirely biographical. I thank you for your comments, your read and review, and your continuing attention to my portfolio!
Merry Christmas,
jeni
Comment from jaydub99
Interesting post and well written. I think this would conjure up thoughts and memories in most people. I was not familiar with this form of poem, so I learned a little something. Solid effort and show a mature and creative thought process. Nice job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Interesting post and well written. I think this would conjure up thoughts and memories in most people. I was not familiar with this form of poem, so I learned a little something. Solid effort and show a mature and creative thought process. Nice job.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Dear friend,
I want to thank you for your kind and flattering comments on my poem. I thank you for reading it and giving it such a nice rating.
Thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio of work.
Merry Christmas
jeni
Comment from Ella25
It is sad but true for so many. Being alone, not wanted and loved by anyone. She was so precious and born with God's love. Lost in a way, no one knows. Still, to this day many young people have no support or a chance to live by example. Either, parents don't care or too busy making money and forget about them in love, time and attention. In a field, I am working (counselling place) I see many children and young people like that. Many on the verge of commiting suicide or a rampage to take other innocent lives. Excellent Nonet nicely put together. Best luck in your contest. Blessings, Ella
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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It is sad but true for so many. Being alone, not wanted and loved by anyone. She was so precious and born with God's love. Lost in a way, no one knows. Still, to this day many young people have no support or a chance to live by example. Either, parents don't care or too busy making money and forget about them in love, time and attention. In a field, I am working (counselling place) I see many children and young people like that. Many on the verge of commiting suicide or a rampage to take other innocent lives. Excellent Nonet nicely put together. Best luck in your contest. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Dear Ella...I want to thank you for your very kind comments...I enjoyed reading this review. God Bless and thanks for your continued attention to my portfolio.
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You are always welcome, my dear. It is a pleasure to read and see your creative side. Thank you for your kind comments. Blessings, Ella
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May God bless you too, this Christmas and always, my dear. Love, Ella
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Or maybe it'll be looing for love in all the wrong places. Very insightful poem. Sometimes no love is better than bad love.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Or maybe it'll be looing for love in all the wrong places. Very insightful poem. Sometimes no love is better than bad love.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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You're absolutely right Tom, thanks for reading and reviewing
Always,
luna
Comment from Pantygynt
The nonet is primarily a syllabic form and yet "Nobody's Child" has a splendid, if slightly irregular rhythm to it, that is quite haunting, with a strong anapestic feel to it. i was a little bemused by the expression "good dime store lovin'" but it seemed to me to have connotations of being showered with cheap gifts that one might give a child. Perhaps though the expression had the darker overtones of here today gone tomorrow sexual encounters.
I was fascinated by it, mainly because it is unusual to see such depths of meaning in what I have always considered to be a somewhat trivial form
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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The nonet is primarily a syllabic form and yet "Nobody's Child" has a splendid, if slightly irregular rhythm to it, that is quite haunting, with a strong anapestic feel to it. i was a little bemused by the expression "good dime store lovin'" but it seemed to me to have connotations of being showered with cheap gifts that one might give a child. Perhaps though the expression had the darker overtones of here today gone tomorrow sexual encounters.
I was fascinated by it, mainly because it is unusual to see such depths of meaning in what I have always considered to be a somewhat trivial form
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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I'm flattered bu your review. I'm happy you enjoyed it and that you thought it brought some meaning to this short form.
I meant dime store lovin' as your last thought, the one with darker overtones.
I'm happy that you read and reviewed. I promise I'll be reviewing your work very soon.
Always,
luna
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Luna, I love nonets! In my 8+ years on this site, I wrote a book completely done in the nonet,over 1500 written!
This is very good because it tells a thought provoking story of a woman wandering looking for love in a truck stop. Just wants someone to hold her!
Very well done Luna,,,,,,, Jim
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Luna, I love nonets! In my 8+ years on this site, I wrote a book completely done in the nonet,over 1500 written!
This is very good because it tells a thought provoking story of a woman wandering looking for love in a truck stop. Just wants someone to hold her!
Very well done Luna,,,,,,, Jim
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Jim, when I was last here, I was writing a book on cinquains. I love them. I like the Nonet as well. Thanks so much for your kind review.
Happy holidays,
jeni
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
I LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE PUT TOGETHER HERE
THE PICTURE IS AMAZING WOULD LOVE TO KNOW WHERE YOU
GOT IT. YOUR COLOR SCHEME IS IMPECABLE GREAT WORK
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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I LOVE WHAT YOU HAVE PUT TOGETHER HERE
THE PICTURE IS AMAZING WOULD LOVE TO KNOW WHERE YOU
GOT IT. YOUR COLOR SCHEME IS IMPECABLE GREAT WORK
Comment Written 17-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Abby, I actually had to change the picture because I unintentionally used copyrighted picture. I've replaced it with another, but I'll agree it doesn't match up. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Happy holidays,
jeni
Comment from DonandVicki
I can feel the need in your lovely but sad poem. I think I remember you Luna, I am so very sorry to hear about your Son. My prayers go out to you, i'm glad that you are back.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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I can feel the need in your lovely but sad poem. I think I remember you Luna, I am so very sorry to hear about your Son. My prayers go out to you, i'm glad that you are back.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much for your condolences, It means so much. Yes, and you can see my last profile as "luna" with a small l.
I'm glad the poem touched you and thank you for these words.
Happy holidays,
jeni
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Looking for love in all the wrong places, maybe? A fun to read scenario within a poem that leaves the reader to wonder if she scratched her itch! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Looking for love in all the wrong places, maybe? A fun to read scenario within a poem that leaves the reader to wonder if she scratched her itch! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Mary, I love that song...I'm glad you were left wondering by the poem, actually so was I
Happy holidays,
jeni
