Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Undead"a place to gather my poetic forms
37 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed reading thought provoking Quinzaine poem Luna. Excellent artwork and presentation and the closing line with the question which draws the reader into the "undead" world. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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I enjoyed reading thought provoking Quinzaine poem Luna. Excellent artwork and presentation and the closing line with the question which draws the reader into the "undead" world. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from Ben Colder
would be hard to run in all that snow and ice. Nothing wrong with this poem. Interesting concept I must try sometimes. Best to you.
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would be hard to run in all that snow and ice. Nothing wrong with this poem. Interesting concept I must try sometimes. Best to you.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from AnnaLinda
Luna,
You've chosen an interesting topic which seems to
have a much deeper meaning as well. I see you have
chosen the traditional def. of the form here with
two questions.
Yes, let's all run from the undead.
Good idea...problem is they are everywhere!
Linda
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Luna,
You've chosen an interesting topic which seems to
have a much deeper meaning as well. I see you have
chosen the traditional def. of the form here with
two questions.
Yes, let's all run from the undead.
Good idea...problem is they are everywhere!
Linda
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from starkat
Yes, I can run fast if the undead are closing in on me. Hi jeni - This is a fascinating quinzaine with engaging artwork that places the reader in the midst of the action. Just a note that Fanstory has changed the definition/rules for quinzaine. Shadow Poetry has the 5 and 3 syllables lines as two questions - and that's the way we used to write them. The current rules have the question beginning in the second line and finishing in the third (check contest example). So, it is no longer a requirement that there are 2 question, just one question split into a 5 and 3 syllable lines - such as ...
Undead advancing closer
My next decision,
can I run?
Good luck in the contest. I just wrote one for the contest, but haven't posted yet. Cheers .... ;o) Art
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Yes, I can run fast if the undead are closing in on me. Hi jeni - This is a fascinating quinzaine with engaging artwork that places the reader in the midst of the action. Just a note that Fanstory has changed the definition/rules for quinzaine. Shadow Poetry has the 5 and 3 syllables lines as two questions - and that's the way we used to write them. The current rules have the question beginning in the second line and finishing in the third (check contest example). So, it is no longer a requirement that there are 2 question, just one question split into a 5 and 3 syllable lines - such as ...
Undead advancing closer
My next decision,
can I run?
Good luck in the contest. I just wrote one for the contest, but haven't posted yet. Cheers .... ;o) Art
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hey art, thanks for the informative review. Glad you liked this. Sending you pm
Comment from Kingsland
Zombies like to eat brains. Sometimes I think that Washington is full of Zombies, as most politicians have lost their brains. This is a clever little piece of poetic thoughts. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
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Zombies like to eat brains. Sometimes I think that Washington is full of Zombies, as most politicians have lost their brains. This is a clever little piece of poetic thoughts. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from Pantygynt
This is thew first one of these that I have seen that has managed to get two questions in following the first, statement line. The progression through the two statements is excellent, the first first question being routine almost banal, and certainly rehetorical, followed by the important one that you need to be able to answere in the affirmative or else...
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This is thew first one of these that I have seen that has managed to get two questions in following the first, statement line. The progression through the two statements is excellent, the first first question being routine almost banal, and certainly rehetorical, followed by the important one that you need to be able to answere in the affirmative or else...
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from misscookie
I found your artwork very interesting in deed
Than I read your poem.
This is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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I found your artwork very interesting in deed
Than I read your poem.
This is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from c_lucas
I can run a hundred feet in an hour or so. Slowly finding myself confined to mechanical transportation. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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I can run a hundred feet in an hour or so. Slowly finding myself confined to mechanical transportation. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from William Ross
Nice job on the quinzaine good question on the end can you run as the dead advance. Good luck on this and have a great day
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Nice job on the quinzaine good question on the end can you run as the dead advance. Good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Quinzaine. We all get closer to the finishing line day after day.
The second line has 6 syllables instead of five, and the question is not a very clear question.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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A very well-written Quinzaine. We all get closer to the finishing line day after day.
The second line has 6 syllables instead of five, and the question is not a very clear question.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
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Hi, Sandra! Thanks for reading my poem and leaving me your thoughts.
It seemed that the consensus is divided
... I checked a few Internet syllable counters, and they were just about evenly divided between 2 and 3 syllables in the offending word, business.
Consequently I'm going to leave as is.
Thank you though, for bringing that to my attention. I'm most certainly prone to error!
Love, Jeni
