Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Mystical Meadow Creatures Dance"a place to gather my poetic forms
54 total reviews
Comment from ElegantButler
A beautiful and wondrous poem about many of the fae and spirits that live in the meadows and dance where men are not plodding noisily about. Such beauty there is in so many of this world's ethereal planes.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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A beautiful and wondrous poem about many of the fae and spirits that live in the meadows and dance where men are not plodding noisily about. Such beauty there is in so many of this world's ethereal planes.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, and welcome back onto the site. Also, condolences in the death of your son - obviously a tragic loss.
Your Kyrielle sonnet seems true to form, and flows mostly smoothly, although the iambic meter falters in a couple of places e.g. the start of lines 2 and 3
The imagery of the ritual performed by the creatures of the meadow is compelling and the repetitive nature of this form suits the idea of a ritual, too.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi, and welcome back onto the site. Also, condolences in the death of your son - obviously a tragic loss.
Your Kyrielle sonnet seems true to form, and flows mostly smoothly, although the iambic meter falters in a couple of places e.g. the start of lines 2 and 3
The imagery of the ritual performed by the creatures of the meadow is compelling and the repetitive nature of this form suits the idea of a ritual, too.
Steve
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Luna,
I really love the way your poem dances across the page. The alliteration, especially in the first stanza is stunning, the f's and m's truly steal the show. Thank you for detailing your author's notes, as many won't be aware of the intricacies of this form.
Lovely work!
Kim
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi Luna,
I really love the way your poem dances across the page. The alliteration, especially in the first stanza is stunning, the f's and m's truly steal the show. Thank you for detailing your author's notes, as many won't be aware of the intricacies of this form.
Lovely work!
Kim
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
Comment from patcelaw
Beautifully written and presented sonnet in memory of your son.Your rhyming scheme is very interesting. Have a great weekend and blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Beautifully written and presented sonnet in memory of your son.Your rhyming scheme is very interesting. Have a great weekend and blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Luna
I am so sorry about your son, it must be heartbreaking. It is great to dedicate your poetry to him. The poem is so enjoyable with great imagery,
Where centaurs bold and fairies bright
come play together in the night,
I loved the whole poem and the repeating line, I really love these two lines.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Hi Luna
I am so sorry about your son, it must be heartbreaking. It is great to dedicate your poetry to him. The poem is so enjoyable with great imagery,
Where centaurs bold and fairies bright
come play together in the night,
I loved the whole poem and the repeating line, I really love these two lines.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Dear Jackarrie,
Thank you for your review. I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to respond. I am out of town at my sister - in - laws deathbed. We're having to pull this plug tomorrow due to her wishes. Please understand if I don't answer reviews right away for a short period of time. ❤️❤️❤️
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You are certainly getting your fair share of tragedy. We waiting for 2 relatives to pass on, and one friend. also recently one close friend passed all from Cancer. I am sure fanstory is the last thing on your mind, at present. keep strong. Mary
Comment from royowen
A beautifully dedicated and mystical poem. It covers a wonderland of creatures who written in literary stories, poetry, and anecdotal legends over the centuries. Beautiful timing, rhyming and a fluid write, to engender the lighter, hope-filled things in life. A nicely scribed Kyrielle, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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A beautifully dedicated and mystical poem. It covers a wonderland of creatures who written in literary stories, poetry, and anecdotal legends over the centuries. Beautiful timing, rhyming and a fluid write, to engender the lighter, hope-filled things in life. A nicely scribed Kyrielle, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Dear royowen,
I thank you for your review. I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to respond. I am out of town at my sister - in - laws deathbed. We're having to pull this plug tomorrow due to her wishes. Please understand if I don't answer reviews right away for a short period of time. ❤️❤️❤️
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Please don't apologise, you're mission is of paramount importance, my sympathy and blessing, Roy
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Jeni
= So very sorry for your loss. I can only imagine the hell you and your family have lived through, and always will.
= I understand the curse of addiction, because my son has been riding that train for many years. At 46, I've doubts it will ever change. We've lost touch, so I never know where he is, what he's doing, or how he's living.
= Such a touching bio. Perhaps your writing will help fill some of the despair you feel. Blessings to you and your family. (*<*)
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Hi, Jeni
= So very sorry for your loss. I can only imagine the hell you and your family have lived through, and always will.
= I understand the curse of addiction, because my son has been riding that train for many years. At 46, I've doubts it will ever change. We've lost touch, so I never know where he is, what he's doing, or how he's living.
= Such a touching bio. Perhaps your writing will help fill some of the despair you feel. Blessings to you and your family. (*<*)
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I'm sorry this reply to your kind review is so late. I've just returned from Philadelphia dealing with the loss of my dear sister-in-law. I hope you understand.
Again, thank you for the review!
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= So very sorry for you loss.
= It's never easy to lose one.
= Not to worry about the late reply at all.
= Blessings. (*<*)
Comment from Heather Knight
I'm so sorry to hear about your son, Jeni. I hope to see more of you. This poem is absolutely beautiful. The artwork is also spectacular. I wish I had a sixer left.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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I'm so sorry to hear about your son, Jeni. I hope to see more of you. This poem is absolutely beautiful. The artwork is also spectacular. I wish I had a sixer left.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Dear Maria,
thank you for your review and condolences. I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to respond. I am out of town at my sister - in - laws deathbed. We're having to pull this plug tomorrow due to her wishes. Please understand if I don't answer reviews right away for a short period of time. ❤️❤️❤️
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No worries, Jeni. Take care.
Comment from sanejane
What a beautifully executed Kyrielle Sonnet. The meter is good, and the rhyme completely natural. The repeating line:
Mystical meadow creatures dance.
sweeps me up, making me want to join the dance. Lovely!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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What a beautifully executed Kyrielle Sonnet. The meter is good, and the rhyme completely natural. The repeating line:
Mystical meadow creatures dance.
sweeps me up, making me want to join the dance. Lovely!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Dear sanejane,
thank you for your review. I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to respond. I am out of town at my sister - in - laws deathbed. We're having to pull this plug tomorrow due to her wishes. Please understand if I don't answer reviews right away for a short period of time. ❤️❤️❤️
Comment from Oatmeal
LUNA,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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LUNA,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Dear oatmeal, thanks so much for the in - depth review and also for the member cent puma you placed on the work.
I truly appreciate you.
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I will try to help you when I can.
See you soon...you are very welcome.
Love you,
Camille
