Aghast
A (slightly modified) Octogram poem102 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Loved the art work so much
for these words written in everyway
A bit scary but the words were written very well
Great poem to read.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Loved the art work so much
for these words written in everyway
A bit scary but the words were written very well
Great poem to read.
Honey tree
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Thanks for the great R&R, Annie.
Much appreciated.
~Dean :}
Comment from DonandVicki
I really do like your original work Dean, It has that "Goosebumps" feel to it. I enjoyed the swamp sound effects and the art work as well.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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I really do like your original work Dean, It has that "Goosebumps" feel to it. I enjoyed the swamp sound effects and the art work as well.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Yeah, I guess it is a little Goosebump-ish, Don, now that you mention it.
Take care, and thanks for the R&R.
~Dean
Comment from Belinda
Wow... it's hard enough to write a creepy poem, let alone in a difficult form like the octogram, the syllable count, the rhymes and all. With your excellent choice of words meticulously crafted, thumbs up to you, Dean... (I still shudder.)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Wow... it's hard enough to write a creepy poem, let alone in a difficult form like the octogram, the syllable count, the rhymes and all. With your excellent choice of words meticulously crafted, thumbs up to you, Dean... (I still shudder.)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review AGHAST, Belinda.
I very much appreciate your enthusiastic response. It's most encouraging.

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I loved this. About a year ago we watched a show about finding Big Foot. It was certainly interesting and your poem reminded me of that show we watched. Great job friend and the background music was perfect
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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I loved this. About a year ago we watched a show about finding Big Foot. It was certainly interesting and your poem reminded me of that show we watched. Great job friend and the background music was perfect
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing AGHAST, Meghan.
I sincerely appreciate your comments, as well as your exceptionally generous six-star rating.
Take care, and thanks again.
~Dean :}
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great graphics, as usual.
-I like the narration; I guess you won't tell how that was done?!
-Good, eerie octogram.
-Bile Bog sounds like such a 'lovely' place.
-"putrid past" is so inviting, too:)
[excellent alliteration]
-But I guess he couldn't resist and now is hers forever.
-As he's drawn into the dark abyss, a refrain
from a distant past echoes in his brain:
Nevermore...more...more...more
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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-Great graphics, as usual.
-I like the narration; I guess you won't tell how that was done?!
-Good, eerie octogram.
-Bile Bog sounds like such a 'lovely' place.
-"putrid past" is so inviting, too:)
[excellent alliteration]
-But I guess he couldn't resist and now is hers forever.
-As he's drawn into the dark abyss, a refrain
from a distant past echoes in his brain:
Nevermore...more...more...more
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Thanks very much for reading, Pam.
I appreciate your comments, as always.
~Dean
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You are welcome.
Comment from rspoet
You know, I don't have the slightest yen to stroll
in a Bile Bog, midst mold and moss and rotting log
No, high and dry and clear blue sky
suit me just fine. I think I'll try
a stroll down a path in a yellow wood
I think it would make all the difference.
Well written to the form with good syllables and meter
Solid rhyme and near rhyme
Classic Kuch presentation
Well done, my friend
I think these forms expand your talent
and provide interesting variety
to your overall poetic repertoire
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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You know, I don't have the slightest yen to stroll
in a Bile Bog, midst mold and moss and rotting log
No, high and dry and clear blue sky
suit me just fine. I think I'll try
a stroll down a path in a yellow wood
I think it would make all the difference.
Well written to the form with good syllables and meter
Solid rhyme and near rhyme
Classic Kuch presentation
Well done, my friend
I think these forms expand your talent
and provide interesting variety
to your overall poetic repertoire
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Well, they sure do present a challenge for me if nothing else, Robert.
Thanks for the great comments and exceptional six-star rating. I never take those for granted, nor will I you.
Take care,
~Dean
Comment from enitsalemap
I really must try one of these. The form is so intriguing and so is your poem. "Putrid gas, you stare aghast, when she at last, " Such lovely rhymes that propel your story to its VERY SCARY end. I like your genius, yes indeed I do.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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I really must try one of these. The form is so intriguing and so is your poem. "Putrid gas, you stare aghast, when she at last, " Such lovely rhymes that propel your story to its VERY SCARY end. I like your genius, yes indeed I do.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Thanks very much for reading, Pam.
Your feed back is greatly appreciated.
Take care.
~Dean
Comment from Susanjohn
FREAKY!!!!!!Forevermore you're hers!!!! OMG that creepy toad croaking! Nice job with this one...My favorite color USED to be green!!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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FREAKY!!!!!!Forevermore you're hers!!!! OMG that creepy toad croaking! Nice job with this one...My favorite color USED to be green!!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Thanks very much for reading, Susan.
I sincerely appreciate your enthusiastic response.
Take care, and thanks again for the R&R.
~Dean
Comment from write hand blue
What struck me was that the green and black animated colour scheme matched the echoing narration. The poem written within the constraints of those complicated rules manages to produce a chill in the reader. I find this a strange poem... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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What struck me was that the green and black animated colour scheme matched the echoing narration. The poem written within the constraints of those complicated rules manages to produce a chill in the reader. I find this a strange poem... ~Mel~
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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That happened by accident, Mel. It wasn't planned that way, but it all worked out okay in the end.
Thanks again for reading.
I appreciate it.
~Dean
Comment from barkingdog
The Octogram was perfect for this 'echo' type poem.
The erry glow was not swamp gas ... I wonder how long ago and if it was the same man that threw her in the swamp. It sounds like sweet revenge--at least for her.
hee-hee
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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The Octogram was perfect for this 'echo' type poem.
The erry glow was not swamp gas ... I wonder how long ago and if it was the same man that threw her in the swamp. It sounds like sweet revenge--at least for her.
hee-hee
Comment Written 06-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016
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Thanks for reading AGHAST, Ellen, and for the awesome comments and exceptional stellar rating.
I appreciate your time, as well as your thoughtful support.
More than any of that, I'm just damn glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean :}