Curses, Hearses and Deadly Verses
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Comment from Amelie Johns
This sonnet and the imagery described within gives me the chills! I hope some gold coins come with me when I die. The idea of sails made from human bone and skin is so creepy. Thanks for sharing and for the scare
Best wishes,
Amelie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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This sonnet and the imagery described within gives me the chills! I hope some gold coins come with me when I die. The idea of sails made from human bone and skin is so creepy. Thanks for sharing and for the scare
Best wishes,
Amelie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thanks for the great review! Glad you liked it.
Comment from EeanBlack
First, holy crap, the lady in red guy went off. You win already. I have never heard that song. I like how you went across the river Styx, but stopped short of the realm of Hades. Just wrap the body tight against the flies is guttural. That comes from somewhere deep. These are dark images. Don't feel pretentious. Who knows, you might be being led to write a dark masterpiece. When that happens, I'll promote it myself. A highly acidic wine like a Sangioveses goes well with my sun-dried entrails. For that line, I will call you a badass.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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First, holy crap, the lady in red guy went off. You win already. I have never heard that song. I like how you went across the river Styx, but stopped short of the realm of Hades. Just wrap the body tight against the flies is guttural. That comes from somewhere deep. These are dark images. Don't feel pretentious. Who knows, you might be being led to write a dark masterpiece. When that happens, I'll promote it myself. A highly acidic wine like a Sangioveses goes well with my sun-dried entrails. For that line, I will call you a badass.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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lol I kind of liked the sun-dried entrails myself lol Thanks for the great review and the wondrous stars
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I'm sure there is a little clearing in the woods behind your house just strewn with them.
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
What a great poem.
I'm guessing you found the picture and then wrote the poem like you do with your limericks. The picture is great and it inspired a great poem.
the rhyming is perfect. I love the last two lines. It brought a little sense of creepiness to it. I loved the imagery that you used. I really enjoyed reading this poem, I will never regret following you as you produce gem after gem.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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What a great poem.
I'm guessing you found the picture and then wrote the poem like you do with your limericks. The picture is great and it inspired a great poem.
the rhyming is perfect. I love the last two lines. It brought a little sense of creepiness to it. I loved the imagery that you used. I really enjoyed reading this poem, I will never regret following you as you produce gem after gem.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Actually with this one I wrote it first and then found the pic because there are a lot of pictures of him out there. Glad you enjoyed it.
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oh wow. well you picked a great photograph.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Marilyn,
Your book is off to a great start. This poem is nice and creepy and give the reader the chills. You did a wonderful job on this chapter of your book.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Marilyn,
Your book is off to a great start. This poem is nice and creepy and give the reader the chills. You did a wonderful job on this chapter of your book.
Cecilia
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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thanks much
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dear Marilyn, yet again you prove your skill with meter, even venturing into this fine sonnet and capturing the horror of the theme. Stanza 2: just to enhance the flow maybe: "(Preparing) corpses for the lengthy trip.."
"...coins upon the(ir) eyes." (in both cases your choice of words fits the meter but could be smoother) Inspired! Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Dear Marilyn, yet again you prove your skill with meter, even venturing into this fine sonnet and capturing the horror of the theme. Stanza 2: just to enhance the flow maybe: "(Preparing) corpses for the lengthy trip.."
"...coins upon the(ir) eyes." (in both cases your choice of words fits the meter but could be smoother) Inspired! Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thanks so much Debbie
Great suggestions. I made both changes
Appreciate the kind words. I think meter has finally become my friend lol
Comment from Begin Again
No way am I getting near that boat...Your description was perfect to send chills and major regret through anyone who takes a ride.... And gold coins he wants because a life and the body are not enough. A great horror as usual. Nice one for day two!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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No way am I getting near that boat...Your description was perfect to send chills and major regret through anyone who takes a ride.... And gold coins he wants because a life and the body are not enough. A great horror as usual. Nice one for day two!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thanks much for reading my scarier stuff. :-)
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent sonnet describing the journey across the Styx, I love the description of what the boat and the sails are made of, the whole demeanour of the poem contains that dramatic effect of the, this is skilfully written Marilyn, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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This is an excellent sonnet describing the journey across the Styx, I love the description of what the boat and the sails are made of, the whole demeanour of the poem contains that dramatic effect of the, this is skilfully written Marilyn, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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thanks so much, Roy . Appreciate you following my books progress.
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a dark fact of life that we all take this journey in life and we would rather not pay for that ticket, but it is inevitable. Your sonnet is well rhymed and metered and the sentiment is chilling Marilyn, a clever and skilful post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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This is a dark fact of life that we all take this journey in life and we would rather not pay for that ticket, but it is inevitable. Your sonnet is well rhymed and metered and the sentiment is chilling Marilyn, a clever and skilful post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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couldn't have done it without your feedback on the meter. thanks, Dolly
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Awe, thank you Marilyn, I am always happy to help if I can x x x
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, hell, Marilyn! There's a lot here to dissect (yes, all puns are intended). You do a great job of describing the scene - what the boat is made from, it's purpose, and the price that must be paid. "The sides are high against the rising tide." There's so much one can make of this sentence.
You're really cookin' on day 2 of your April adventure.
xo
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Well, hell, Marilyn! There's a lot here to dissect (yes, all puns are intended). You do a great job of describing the scene - what the boat is made from, it's purpose, and the price that must be paid. "The sides are high against the rising tide." There's so much one can make of this sentence.
You're really cookin' on day 2 of your April adventure.
xo
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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thanks Pam. Appreciate your kind review
Comment from RJ Heritage
I grew up reading the stories of the boatman on the River Styx. I like your color and the overall presentation of the poem. It is not very often you see a Sonnet of this genre, Thank you for sharing this with me.
RJ
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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I grew up reading the stories of the boatman on the River Styx. I like your color and the overall presentation of the poem. It is not very often you see a Sonnet of this genre, Thank you for sharing this with me.
RJ
Comment Written 02-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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glad you liked it RJ thanks much
