Nature Wasn't Taught Tenderness
A 150 word story18 total reviews
Comment from Kirsten Shonle
A lot was put into this short yet complete story. I liked the language you used. It is a sad story but life isn't a fairy tail. The story definitely rang true.
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A lot was put into this short yet complete story. I liked the language you used. It is a sad story but life isn't a fairy tail. The story definitely rang true.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told the entire in story and used only a few words. I'm impressed. It's a sad story and one that reminds me that people should not attempt to drive after they've been drinking. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told the entire in story and used only a few words. I'm impressed. It's a sad story and one that reminds me that people should not attempt to drive after they've been drinking. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story is gripping! Reading this I felt like I was on the edge of disaster. The trees reaching for her is so chilling. So well written and such an enjoyable read. Great job!
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Your story is gripping! Reading this I felt like I was on the edge of disaster. The trees reaching for her is so chilling. So well written and such an enjoyable read. Great job!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Gayla putnam
This is the contest winner. It's so well written that I feel like I'm in the car with the girl. I love your descriptive lines, "The party danced on like a drawn-out laugh." You caught me in the mood, and I held my breath as the car careened off the road into the tree's hard embrace. gayla
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This is the contest winner. It's so well written that I feel like I'm in the car with the girl. I love your descriptive lines, "The party danced on like a drawn-out laugh." You caught me in the mood, and I held my breath as the car careened off the road into the tree's hard embrace. gayla
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Glad it's fiction. It doesn't sound survivable. Probably would not have mattered if she was wearing a seatbelt or not.
Nicely written. Good work.
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Glad it's fiction. It doesn't sound survivable. Probably would not have mattered if she was wearing a seatbelt or not.
Nicely written. Good work.
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This flash fiction was expertly written. From the very first line I was hooked by the fascination of our nature wasn't taught tenderness title. On weak legs, she renounced her tomorrow. This beginning told me everything I needed to know to read on with the wide-eyed fascination of a school child who was learning for the first time how nature did to her and what was necessary to prove she had blown it when it came to drinking and partying too much. The ending was inevitable but still sad and fraught with the lesson that nature was never taught to be kind. This was powerful and poignant and made its case for nature and all it knows how to be authentic.
Jesse
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This flash fiction was expertly written. From the very first line I was hooked by the fascination of our nature wasn't taught tenderness title. On weak legs, she renounced her tomorrow. This beginning told me everything I needed to know to read on with the wide-eyed fascination of a school child who was learning for the first time how nature did to her and what was necessary to prove she had blown it when it came to drinking and partying too much. The ending was inevitable but still sad and fraught with the lesson that nature was never taught to be kind. This was powerful and poignant and made its case for nature and all it knows how to be authentic.
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, you describe the horrific scene with tender words here, but still I felt the pain within. One wrong move on the road and we never really know the awful consequences of our actions, an inventive and chilling flash, love Dolly x x x
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Oh my goodness, you describe the horrific scene with tender words here, but still I felt the pain within. One wrong move on the road and we never really know the awful consequences of our actions, an inventive and chilling flash, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
Comment from Karen Cherry
Perfection. Well, I would make the print bigger. We have a lot of people with bad eyesight. They don't read us sometimes because they can't. Very good story. Karen
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Perfection. Well, I would make the print bigger. We have a lot of people with bad eyesight. They don't read us sometimes because they can't. Very good story. Karen
Comment Written 19-Mar-2025
